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donniedarko   
Oct 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time [7]

Sure I will practice more :), thank you dumi.
@Mriytunjay : IELTS task 2 writing requires at least 250 words, my essay has 327 words so I think it's quite a little long instead ... But you're right, adding examples is a good idea. Thank :)
donniedarko   
Oct 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time [7]

Actually, I'm living in a non-English environment. I have to learn and practice all these thing totally alone. So the difficult is that I don't know how my English skill is, what I should do to improve, what the weaknesses are ...etc...

You give me some useful advice and this means a lot to me.
Thanks :).
donniedarko   
Oct 17, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time [7]

Thank you Dumi. It's really helpful.
Could you help me grade my essay, please ? Is it enough to get an 6.5 in IELTS?
donniedarko   
Oct 17, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time [7]

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.


How should we use our spare time? It is supposed to be an easy question but the fact is that there has been much debate about this. To be more specific, one of the most typical issues is whether it is necessary to use our leisure time to build-up our mind by activities such as reading or doing word puzzles. In my own view, it's quite difficult for people to decide whether to support or reject the statement above without a cautious analysis of sides, advantages and disadvantages.

To begin with, no one can alter the fact that those supporters should have all their arguments justified. The first is that there are a lot of people like reading and doing some mind games such as chesses or puzzles because of an apparent reason. These activities are safe and suitable for everyone. It's really hard to indicate some latent risks could be come out of these games. Otherwise, virtually parents leaving home have the hope of their children just reading some books or playing chess. Secondly, they are useful. Reading book helps people to acquire knowledge and playing chess helps players to build up their brain, they are undeniable facts.

On the other hand, people advocating the idea above forgot a simple fact that what so-called free time is the time in which we should do what we want to do and free our mind. Training your brain is a good thing but doing it all the time seems to be not an appropriate manner. Furthermore, lots of people, attached to their works' constrains, do not have chances to move much the whole day, for example, computer programmers. They, in fact, need an outside exercise rather than another unmoving activity.

In conclusion, activities improving mind are good, but are, nonetheless, not the best for many people. The way people should use their free time has to be considered in the term of many sides of their particular life.