Undergraduate / Oddball / the end zone - trying for Stanford early action [4]

On another side, you have a guy whose passion for sports (in particular, Cardinal football) often reaches a level that truly brings the word "fan" to another level. The use of level twice in this sentence is a bit repetitive to me. You could change the first one to point or a different synonym.

I agree with the other two posters too about using more imagery and describing things more of you. That's all I got. Great job and good luck with Standford!

Undergraduate / 'Westport, a small colonial town' - this University of South Carolina Supplement [2]

One typo...From the rich and preppy to the goth and independent. Also charismatic is the correct spelling I believe. I would suggest talking more about how the small town setting affected you socially and if you were more a part of your community because of how small the town was. Maybe talk about your family more since they are a part of your environment and include a childhood story. Just suggestions but great start!

Book Reports / ESSAY ON OEDIPUS'S SYMBOL OF THE CROSSROAD [2]

I thought this was a very well thought out and written essay about Oedipus and the symbol of the crossroads. I liked how you include the number 3 as significant and the way that Oedipus could not out run his fate. I think everything looks great. Good job!