nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Undergraduate / 'many aspects to me' - Morgan state univeristy essay [3]
thanks i write a revised version
thanks i write a revised version
nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Passion with a cause' - Common App Essay: personal experience [4]
WOW!! This is a really good essay!!!! I think it could do without so many paragraphs though but other than that its great!!! and I looovvvvveeeee the timeline thing!! Very nice!
WOW!! This is a really good essay!!!! I think it could do without so many paragraphs though but other than that its great!!! and I looovvvvveeeee the timeline thing!! Very nice!
nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Undergraduate / "a diverse community" umich supplement #1 [4]
actually it is 'If I was brought up' I agree about the 'I believe thing though' Then you can give more examples of the diversity you talked about like maybe how its different with Arab friends and Hindu friends or something ,like that
actually it is 'If I was brought up' I agree about the 'I believe thing though' Then you can give more examples of the diversity you talked about like maybe how its different with Arab friends and Hindu friends or something ,like that
nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Undergraduate / 'many aspects to me' - Morgan state univeristy essay [3]
I need more stuff to add and please help to make it more interesting
The whole is greater than the sum of its parts.' - Aristotle. The intellectual, social and cultural differences embraced by Morgan State University are integral to the fabric of our community. The strength of the University is realized through the contributions of every member of our campus. We understand each individual is a result of his/her personal background and experiences. Describe the parts that add up to the sum of you. (Maximum 500 words)
There are many aspects to me. My family for one is a huge part of me. I love hanging out with my family. My mum is the extrovert of the family and my dad is the introvert. It's no wonder I am a cross between an introvert and an extrovert. I cherish my privacy and I don't always like to go out for parties but when I do go out I make sure I have as much fun as possible. Music is also a big part of me. I play the guitar fairly well and I also play the piano. My academic life is a part of me I can't omit. I love everything about my school- the teachers, the learning atmosphere and most especially the students. The teachers in my school are really nice and very understanding. They know how to convey a message to students in the easiest and most understandable way possible. My friends that I act mature for my age and have been commended on my ability to keep a cool head in high pressure situations. I am a very independent person and I prefer to do things on my own. I don't usually ask my parents for help with most things. I don't like asking my parents for money so I always have my own to buy things I need at anytime like school stuff.
please help its very urgent !!!!
Thanks in advance!!! :)
I need more stuff to add and please help to make it more interesting
The whole is greater than the sum of its parts.' - Aristotle. The intellectual, social and cultural differences embraced by Morgan State University are integral to the fabric of our community. The strength of the University is realized through the contributions of every member of our campus. We understand each individual is a result of his/her personal background and experiences. Describe the parts that add up to the sum of you. (Maximum 500 words)
There are many aspects to me. My family for one is a huge part of me. I love hanging out with my family. My mum is the extrovert of the family and my dad is the introvert. It's no wonder I am a cross between an introvert and an extrovert. I cherish my privacy and I don't always like to go out for parties but when I do go out I make sure I have as much fun as possible. Music is also a big part of me. I play the guitar fairly well and I also play the piano. My academic life is a part of me I can't omit. I love everything about my school- the teachers, the learning atmosphere and most especially the students. The teachers in my school are really nice and very understanding. They know how to convey a message to students in the easiest and most understandable way possible. My friends that I act mature for my age and have been commended on my ability to keep a cool head in high pressure situations. I am a very independent person and I prefer to do things on my own. I don't usually ask my parents for help with most things. I don't like asking my parents for money so I always have my own to buy things I need at anytime like school stuff.
please help its very urgent !!!!
Thanks in advance!!! :)
nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Undergraduate / 'the value/characteristics of your generation' - grammar in my essay? [4]
The amount of Money is essential for a good standard of living. When someone decreases income, it means that they have either lost their jobs or are now working part time.As a resultTherefore , good living standards are the result of economic development. Our generation has a lot of opportunities to develop in the convenient lifeunlike our parent's generation which didn't have as much opportunities . Our parents' generation didn't have the fast internet,ormany opportunities to work, or study as we do now . The most essential values in our generation are study method in(I dont think this is necessary here) education, community service, and advanced technology in school.
The characteristic in my generation is the active study method in education.Unnecessary Students havetake part in many activities such as presentations , working in group and discussing or arguing the questions. The students can re search for more information about the lesson. Moreover, they can question their teacher. For example, in Biology 40A class, my instructor teaches about the functions and the structures of the cells. He said that we have to use microscope to watch the cell. So, the student asked the instructor that "Why are cells small?" My instructor answered the question by explaining surface area of the cells.Rephrase this partDon't include the speech marks as it seems a bit childish rather than reported speech. You could just explain that he was teaching about the structures when someone asked a question. Then the teacher explained it or even provide a diffferent example all together. Just my opinion though When the student asked the question, they can better understand the lesson. When the students can ask questions and discuss in the classroom, the classroom becomes more interactive.Therefore, the value of my generation is active in the study method.
That's all I was able to do. Hope it helps.
That's all I was able to do. Hope it helps.
nky99913
Oct 24, 2012
Essays / When you decide what is right and what is easy - opinion on this hardest decision topic? [5]
You could say like maybe a friend wanted to do something that you know was wrong but he/she wanted really to do it and you knew that if you didn't help he/she would never talk to you again.
Or maybe you had two best friends and they got into a fight and they asked you to choose between them. There is one you known for longer but the other one you just like better so you were confused and stuff like that..
Just some ideas, you don't have to use them if you don't like them.
You could say like maybe a friend wanted to do something that you know was wrong but he/she wanted really to do it and you knew that if you didn't help he/she would never talk to you again.
Or maybe you had two best friends and they got into a fight and they asked you to choose between them. There is one you known for longer but the other one you just like better so you were confused and stuff like that..
Just some ideas, you don't have to use them if you don't like them.
