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Oct 31, 2012
Undergraduate / Oddball / the end zone - trying for Stanford early action [4]

I spy with my little eye another FHSite.

I agree with historyfreak13 on the show, not tell technique. Some of the MIT blogs have some information on that if you're interested.

The roommate letter has a lot of voice in it and you add a lot of information in a short space. Ending in my opinion is a little cheesy, but hey, it definitely adds to voice.

The second essay really ties frisbee back with your personality.

Adding some details and imagery could help with visualization.
I didn't catch any grammar mistakes, but then again it's late.

Edit: I almost forgot! Good luck with Stanford!
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