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Nov 4, 2012
Undergraduate / 'The Strength My Mother Gave Me' - Common App (Topic of Choice) [3]

This essay has a powerful message. I felt like it was kinda short, but what do I know. " My mother's addiction ripped my family to shreds. " seems to put alot of blame on your mother, maybe changing that phrase would make the essay much better.
adityab   
Nov 4, 2012
Undergraduate / Common App : Short Answer: Swimming as an analogy [3]

This is my first post... not sure how it still works here.

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)

Swimming: a sport of endurance and strength; a challenge to be the best. Competitive swimming is more than just a sport, it is will to push oneself past their limits. The will to win, whether in practice or a meet, came from my inner mindset to be better. It is the amalgamation of the individual and the team, blending in order to achieve the ultimate success. To me, this was more than a sport. It was a mental test every day, as it was physical; I became the person I wanted to be by going the whole nine yards. I knew I could crash, and took my chances. I put every breath into each stroke, and knew that failure came from relinquishing goals. As much as swimming is a lesson on being tough, it is a journey into life as a leader. Through swimming, I would maintain a demeanor of self-sufficient individuality, and always took lead. I strive to be that leader not only in the pool, but outside. Ultimately, I see swimming as something of an analogy to life: to be something, you have to be yourself.

It broke the 1000 character limit... whatever. Any criticism is necessary, I can take it. Is it a good short answer, or is it the average?
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