Undergraduate / Personal Statement for Fashion Schools - 'I am ready' [4]

I'm applying for three fashion schools in the U.K via Universities and Colleges Admissions Service(UCAS).
It's a rough copy of my personal statement.
I expect some suggestions on the content and fixes for wrong grammar:))
Thanks

I was destined to do fashion. Since I was little in kindergarten, I would like to go shopping with my mother to a cheap marketplace every weekend, presented my brand-new clothes to class mates, and felt refreshed. Growing up, I have loved watching fashion-related TV shows and magazines, and fashion is naturally prioritized for me to look at in mass media. When I watched the Breakfast at Tiffany's, I could not help myself more concentrating on Audrey Hepburn's black mini dress and pearl necklace than the story itself. My passion for fashion never leaves ever since.

Born into a middle class family whose parents run a pharmacy, I had grown relatively affluent. Thanks to my parents, I was able to afford any fashion items I wanted. It was feasible for me to be interested in fashion and I took it gratefully.

When I turned 16, in virtue of my parents' well-off business, I gained a wonderful opportunity to spend the last 2 years of high school in Canada, which had me more drawn to the splendid fashion world. The fashionable city Toronto overwhelmed me with "hot" fashion brands, such as H&M, Forever 21, and Urban Outfitters. Watching their collections, I could not only be aware of the latest trends in high fashion but also learned a strategy how successfully those brands made it affordable for people to buy their products by putting new trends in them at cheaper prices.

Spending high school in Canada, I took International Business that has combined with my idea of fashion and assured me that it could make my dream real. I learned basic business key words, how a business works, what factors are considered while running a business, and what skills are required to be a business person. But most significantly, now I became more capable of applying them to real business situations, while I more clinged to memorizing the concepts and context before. It will help me find connections between fashion and merchandising.

After graduating high school, I came back to Korea to get work experience. I was hired as a stylist's assistant in Seoul. Whenever we had work, I was always the one who first arrived at the set, prepared and arranged items that were used for the photoshoot. Sometimes I got to select items that I thought they would go well with the "concept" of the photoshoot. For a month of this experience, I learned how to get along with the a little bit "picky" fashion people. I also learned the significance of effective advertisement. Even though it was short and tough time, I could never be happier contributing myself to fashion.

Coming back from Seoul, I got another job at a clothing store in my hometown. I was only a part-time worker who sold clothes the store had, but tried to relate the experience with what I want to study in my near future. I became proficient at catching customer's needs in fashion and promoting clothes we had. I learned how to deal with customers, as well as coordinate fashion items suitable enough to attract them to buy. In addition, my communication skill has come with it. I found myself talking friendly with customers withough being shy of strangers. Knowing what people pursue in fashion and having a good communication skill will be great back-ups for me to study fashion merchandising.

With the plentiful work experience at real firms that will be provided for me, I can imagine myself as a buyer for my favorite brand, which I have dreamed of all my life. I am ready to take the chance that the U.K's greatest fashion schools will offer me.