Lanbekaka
Nov 11, 2012
Undergraduate / Ringling transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. [2]
Quite a few grammatical errors.
"Ever since I was little I wanted to be a veterinarian. I grew up with cats and dogs..."
Consider saying art schools rather than art type.
And use THAN when comparing.
When you mention "I thought it would be awesome to" I would clarify to be a veterinarian because it's a bit unclear.
Also, I would stick to periods rather than exclamation marks, it gives the essay a more serious tone.
Quite a few grammatical errors.
"Ever since I was little I wanted to be a veterinarian. I grew up with cats and dogs..."
Consider saying art schools rather than art type.
And use THAN when comparing.
When you mention "I thought it would be awesome to" I would clarify to be a veterinarian because it's a bit unclear.
Also, I would stick to periods rather than exclamation marks, it gives the essay a more serious tone.