narayani
Nov 24, 2012
Writing Feedback / The role of women - they should not sit at home if they don't want to [7]
Jennyflower81 , thank u very much, really appreciated :)
Jennyflower81 , thank u very much, really appreciated :)
narayani
Nov 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / The role of women - they should not sit at home if they don't want to [7]
Here is my attempt to write an essay on above topic. If u guys could help me to correct my essay, i would be really grateful towards you. thank you.
It is undeniable fact that, now days women are in more powerful position than they used to be. some people believe that this has made role confusion in society with negative connotation and more children's are engaging in violence and crime, and resulting in juvenile delinquency. Although women power might be a one reason for increasing number of social crime but I don't think it is the main contributing factors.
To began with, it is both parents responsibilities to look after their children in order to make responsible adults in a society. Child with a single dad can be a brightest student in the school where as well look after mummy's boy may commit a crime. Children's violence behaviour depends on environment and cultural of home as well as the society, and how they grew up. To simplify, if we see juvenile delinquency rate in Hampshire is 5% higher than in Surrey in 2005. But women employment rate is higher in Surrey as compare to Hampshire.
And also women can look after their babies and job very well together. With the help of day care centres and nurseries mother can continue their job. Day care centres and nurseries also helps children to socialise in positive way and can learn to co operate with each others. There is however chance of youngsters to go out of track if parents didn't supervise and guide children regularly. Parents should be familiar with children friend circles and asked them to stay away with bad friend if necessary.
To summarise, juvenile delinquency and social crimes and not depends on where their mother is working or not. This alarming problem is manly due to lack to supervision and proper guidance from parents and other senior member of the society. And also the environment is main contributing factor for situation to occur.
Here is my attempt to write an essay on above topic. If u guys could help me to correct my essay, i would be really grateful towards you. thank you.
It is undeniable fact that, now days women are in more powerful position than they used to be. some people believe that this has made role confusion in society with negative connotation and more children's are engaging in violence and crime, and resulting in juvenile delinquency. Although women power might be a one reason for increasing number of social crime but I don't think it is the main contributing factors.
To began with, it is both parents responsibilities to look after their children in order to make responsible adults in a society. Child with a single dad can be a brightest student in the school where as well look after mummy's boy may commit a crime. Children's violence behaviour depends on environment and cultural of home as well as the society, and how they grew up. To simplify, if we see juvenile delinquency rate in Hampshire is 5% higher than in Surrey in 2005. But women employment rate is higher in Surrey as compare to Hampshire.
And also women can look after their babies and job very well together. With the help of day care centres and nurseries mother can continue their job. Day care centres and nurseries also helps children to socialise in positive way and can learn to co operate with each others. There is however chance of youngsters to go out of track if parents didn't supervise and guide children regularly. Parents should be familiar with children friend circles and asked them to stay away with bad friend if necessary.
To summarise, juvenile delinquency and social crimes and not depends on where their mother is working or not. This alarming problem is manly due to lack to supervision and proper guidance from parents and other senior member of the society. And also the environment is main contributing factor for situation to occur.
