Undergraduate / 'the cancer survivor' - How my grandmother has influenced me: Essay B [2]

Thanks for your help with my short answer for Brown! As for yours, I have a few nitpicky things to point out:

You should put "or" before "a devoted Christian" in your first sentence.
In your second sentence, a comma can be put in place of your semicolon. The two clauses flow fine and do not need such a defining pause as a semicolon suggests.

In the sentence "My grandmother the Christian is full of prayer and devotion, with church every Sunday, and bible readings every morning. " - instead of saying "with church...and bibile readings.." try saying attending instead (unless you're short on characters or something), because that, contextually, would make more sense.

Finally, try not to use contractions in an essay. While you want to sound like your normal self, this is still an important essay, and the use of contractions makes it sound a little less formal, you know?

Other than those super minor things, your essay is fabulous and touching. Best of luck to you! I truly hope you get in. :)