jen94
Nov 27, 2012
Undergraduate / How SCS-TV Has Influenced Me-University of Dayton Admissions Essay [2]
I'm thinking of taking out the last sentence of the first paragraph to make it 252 words (I'm really looking for ideas on how to cut it down.) Do you agree with that idea, and/or have any others? Also, if you don't like my intro, please help me find another journalism quote that fits or give me a general idea of what I can do, because that's the best I could come up with...thank you! :) Maybe I'll take out the sentence about upperclassmen talking about colleges, too?
Please submit an essay (250 words maximum) in the area provided, describing a significant achievement, experience or risk and its impact on you.
"TV From a Student's Point of View" was the slogan of the school district news station I was a part of during my middle school years. SCS-TV was a show on the public access channel in my town, in which students from each of the elementary schools, middle schools, and the high school would report stories happening in their location. On "tape dates" we would film the high school anchors doing segways into our stories, and would take turns doing things such as working the teleprompter,and counting the outtakes. It was my passion for writing that drove me to apply, but I thought it would be interesting to be a part of an actual news station.
Although the program was cut after my eighth grade year due to budget funding, it had sparked my interest in journalism. Along with writing each story, I had the experience of reporting on screen and working behind the scenes. SCS-TV showed me the possibilities of journalism, as I heard upperclassmen talk about which colleges they were considering for journalism or communication. I learned how to word an interview question, and how a news show is pieced together. On a larger scale, it helped me come out of my shell. I grew to feel more comfortable emailing teachers, and asking questions during interviews. Being accountable to the advisor and to my fellow reporters taught me valuable lessons about responsibility and work ethic. In conclusion, SCS-TV has helped shape me and has given me the goals I have today. (279 words)
I'm thinking of taking out the last sentence of the first paragraph to make it 252 words (I'm really looking for ideas on how to cut it down.) Do you agree with that idea, and/or have any others? Also, if you don't like my intro, please help me find another journalism quote that fits or give me a general idea of what I can do, because that's the best I could come up with...thank you! :) Maybe I'll take out the sentence about upperclassmen talking about colleges, too?
Please submit an essay (250 words maximum) in the area provided, describing a significant achievement, experience or risk and its impact on you.
"TV From a Student's Point of View" was the slogan of the school district news station I was a part of during my middle school years. SCS-TV was a show on the public access channel in my town, in which students from each of the elementary schools, middle schools, and the high school would report stories happening in their location. On "tape dates" we would film the high school anchors doing segways into our stories, and would take turns doing things such as working the teleprompter,and counting the outtakes. It was my passion for writing that drove me to apply, but I thought it would be interesting to be a part of an actual news station.
Although the program was cut after my eighth grade year due to budget funding, it had sparked my interest in journalism. Along with writing each story, I had the experience of reporting on screen and working behind the scenes. SCS-TV showed me the possibilities of journalism, as I heard upperclassmen talk about which colleges they were considering for journalism or communication. I learned how to word an interview question, and how a news show is pieced together. On a larger scale, it helped me come out of my shell. I grew to feel more comfortable emailing teachers, and asking questions during interviews. Being accountable to the advisor and to my fellow reporters taught me valuable lessons about responsibility and work ethic. In conclusion, SCS-TV has helped shape me and has given me the goals I have today. (279 words)
