mary1226
Aug 10, 2013
Undergraduate / KEEP YOUR HEAD UP! - Motivation to be a Physician Assistant (Application Essay) [2]
Receiving my Urban EMT certificate and training in wilderness medicinefrom the National Outdoor Leadership School of Lander, Wyoming led me to take a job as ---It's not necessary to me...it's a space filler and that can be annoying at times
Rearrange to emphasize the first thus making it stronger and more relevant to what PAs do:
I administered medications , ordered and organized all medical supplies, and held meetings with staff to
"It is very important to me to have flexibility in my career. As a Physician Assistant, being trained as a generalist will allow me this, while providing a well-rounded knowledge of medicine with the collaborative work with other healthcare professionals." -- I like this a lot.
Rejection from a Physician Assistant program last year propelled me to take steps in bettering myself and my understanding of medicine. --- Are you re-applying to the same school? If so, I would say,As a re-applicant, I invested/dedicated this past year to further understanding medicine, developing new skills, and honing in my talents to better serve patients as a Physician Assistant. ...It's up to you. If you are not re-applying to the same school, then delete the whole rejection part...they don't need to know but you can still state you dedicated this past year to...insert here...
While working full-time at a children's rehabilitation hospital, I attended classes and committed myself to exceptional grades. A personal interest in science and health along with the knowledge that these classes were the gateway to improving my future provided the motivation I needed. ---Great!
I will do everything I can to achieve my goal of becoming a Physician Assistant. --- Cut out or rephrase:My fervent desire has enabled me to take advantage of every opportunity available to further understand and relate to the role of a Physician Assistant in the medical field.???
I truly believe that Physician Assistants have the most fortunate healthcare job.--Why?? I would avoid words like "most," "best," "always"...etc
I know that this career will challenge me and that it is also a practical option for the future that I see for myself. -- Makes me think you are also thinking of other options right now. You don't want to plant any seeds of doubt.
Working with John and other patients at J.D. McCarty Center have shown me how rewarding it is to help people learn how to take control of their health. I believe that Physician Assistants have the best opportunity to positively influence a patient's health and life. I am certain that this is the career for me. -- Awesome!
Overall, very good start! I like that you have a lot of patient experience and you are working hard at making this dream a reality! Good luck!!
Receiving my Urban EMT certificate and training in wilderness medicine
Rearrange to emphasize the first thus making it stronger and more relevant to what PAs do:
I administered medications , ordered and organized all medical supplies, and held meetings with staff to
"It is very important to me to have flexibility in my career. As a Physician Assistant, being trained as a generalist will allow me this, while providing a well-rounded knowledge of medicine with the collaborative work with other healthcare professionals." -- I like this a lot.
Rejection from a Physician Assistant program last year propelled me to take steps in bettering myself and my understanding of medicine. --- Are you re-applying to the same school? If so, I would say,As a re-applicant, I invested/dedicated this past year to further understanding medicine, developing new skills, and honing in my talents to better serve patients as a Physician Assistant. ...It's up to you. If you are not re-applying to the same school, then delete the whole rejection part...they don't need to know but you can still state you dedicated this past year to...insert here...
While working full-time at a children's rehabilitation hospital, I attended classes and committed myself to exceptional grades. A personal interest in science and health along with the knowledge that these classes were the gateway to improving my future provided the motivation I needed. ---Great!
I will do everything I can to achieve my goal of becoming a Physician Assistant. --- Cut out or rephrase:My fervent desire has enabled me to take advantage of every opportunity available to further understand and relate to the role of a Physician Assistant in the medical field.???
I truly believe that Physician Assistants have the most fortunate healthcare job.--Why?? I would avoid words like "most," "best," "always"...etc
I know that this career will challenge me and that it is also a practical option for the future that I see for myself. -- Makes me think you are also thinking of other options right now. You don't want to plant any seeds of doubt.
Working with John and other patients at J.D. McCarty Center have shown me how rewarding it is to help people learn how to take control of their health. I believe that Physician Assistants have the best opportunity to positively influence a patient's health and life. I am certain that this is the career for me. -- Awesome!
Overall, very good start! I like that you have a lot of patient experience and you are working hard at making this dream a reality! Good luck!!