Undergraduate / A second chance to so something differently - personal statement [7]

"about his leaving" -about him leaving

You say you need to make your essay shorter. I believe that you are the only person that can do this since you are the only person that will know what sentence or part to eliminate depending on the value it has to you. A good advice is to leave your essay alone and after a day or two(forget about it) and then read it again and you will find any changes you want to make.

Good luck!!!!!!