Graduate / BUSINESS LAW; Reasons for seeking admission and future plan [2]

its really big, and super wordy, by the time i got to the middle i was pretty bored, you should focus on a certain subject rather than jumping into different topics, and maximum is 1000 right ? so u should not even right that much. and it has so many numbers, focus more on personality. It looks like a story you wrote to your new friend that you found on some "friendship" website...

and its really standard answer. I wont say I can write better but you still should add better hook and more creativity.

Good luck :)

Undergraduate / Tropical Humid to Cold foggy area- UC Personal statement Prompt#2 [2]

really nice essay.
Good hook, and i enjoyed reading it, i believe admission stuff will like it also. it feels like a reading a novel.
what is the word limit? 500 ?
and the beginning of the 3rd paragraph you should change it little bit since it feels like reading same stuff i have already read in first one. try using different words maybe...

Good luck with your application. :)

Graduate / My reason for wanting to pursue graduate physics in graduate school is simple; SOP [6]

generally looks good,
but not creative, and little bit boring... maybe because of the poor hook?
and seems little bit wordy. 775 words ? isn't it too much ?
stick to about 600 if you can, (without loosing meaning)
ending is awesome, no comments on that one.
its just the beginning that looks black and white... add some colours, and more personality their.

Good luck with the rest of your application ! :)