Posts by sakin
Joined: Dec 25, 2012 |
Last Post: Dec 26, 2012
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Undergraduate /
My father worked in a graveyard for my heavenly dreams; Princeton/Influential Person [5]
wow, first of all great word choice.
I think it's good, you talk about your self, personality pretty well. and your dad's story is pretty inspirational. You have the prompt nailed, but maybe you should add something about why Princeton is the school for you, that is what everyone has being telling when I wrote about the same prompt for the common app.
Undergraduate /
Why mount the Everest? Because it is there! Common Essay [2]
"are literally tiny confined in that tiny room" rephrase this part.
"Lack of neither financially nor spiritually supports, I got really CAUGHT UP." you could say something like due to the lack of financial and spiritual support.../
I like your story, it's really inspirational but it needs to be more organised. There are couple of grammar mishaps.
Undergraduate /
Students Stress! Causes; Changing jobs; Studying; Working; Health problems [3]
You are in the right direction. i did project about student stress too, we had to do during finals week and give the students advice about how to manage the stress of finals. we made announcements about the importance of eating right and exercise.
so maybe when you talk about the causes you can also talk about ways to prevent them. have little tips section.
I hope this helps.
Undergraduate /
I love weather in Boston, diverse environment; Boston U Supp/ Why apply? [2]
In no more than 250 words, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission?
As I write these words I'm defying my reality. I need to get away from this reality and unchain myself from the crippling hands of insecurity and low expectations. I live in daydreams because my reality does not support my dreams, the girl that is alive in mind and heart is ready to come out and Boston University is the place that can help her become alive. The diverse and globally minded environment of BU is what she needs. BU is the place for me to grow and find people that will inspire me to become the strong, leading woman I aspire to be. I have dreamed in silence for so long, but I'm ready to turn on the lights and open my eyes to the world so that I can be part of it and change it. BU is the school for me because I would love the weather of Boston, its energy and its global connections.
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