Undergraduate / Dhaka is really close to my heart! -Stanford- What matters to you and why? [4]

Dhaka is a city, I hold really close to my heart. I have seen gradually become an increasingly ugly,urbanisedurbanized mess with awhich displays a massive divide between the rich and the poor.I feel that a major step to helping this city get back to the way it was would be helping the latter people of the divide and it is helping these people, the "urban poor" section of my beloved city that really matters to me.(you may not want to show clear favoritism towards one side because you dont know what type of person is reading the essay. So try this instead

In order for Dhaka to become the city it was once was, I believe that this economic gap must be bridged.
I've grown up playing football with boys who were not fortunate to have proper homes and were always roaming around on streets. Playing with me over the years, they have established a soft spot in my heart and I have tried to help them whenever I could but they were just a handful comprising a minute portion of the unfortunate population.

My desire to help these individuals has risen from knowing young boys that were facing such inequalities. I have grown up playing football with boys who were not fortunate enough to have proper homes. They roamed the streets in search for proper shelter and food and it was a site that ignited in me a desire to help. I have tried to help these boys in any way I could but I realize that they were only a minute portion of the larger poor population

In an effort to help these people I came up with a simple idea of Share2care, a trust that a Trust that collects small donations (minimum 20 taka) from customers at high end restaurants and distributes them to charitable organisationsorganizations . This is as a small measure against income inequality but I hope that this can grow into something much larger so that it can have a greater impact., sitting in my father's restaurant, Spitfire.

I really feel that the immensely rich folks of this divided city can definitely spend a meagre portion of their wealth on the less fortunate to make this city as wonderful as it was. ( you may want to focus on the organizations that can help like yours. It would put you in the essay more and you are providing an option.)

Hope this helps and good luck on your other applications!

Undergraduate / Impeccable academics, breath taking view; Northwestern Sup- Why Northwestern? [3]

I value research while I continue my journey of self-exploration towards discovering my major and passion.
I think that you should elaborate on this a little more because you say that you value research but why? You never really explain that and you always want to make sure that any statement is fully explained so that the reader is not left wondering.

Also I am not sure how the university would feel about using NU instead of the full name, so to be safe just use the full name.

The rest of the essay was quite good but the last sentence you may want to rework a bit. I tried to think of something else to put in but I really could not.

I hope that this helped you and good luck!