Undergraduate / Issue of Importance - Helping Students Have an Education [3]

I had some difficulties with this essay. Mainly on getting my thoughts to paper. Basically, I want to help kids and students of all circumstances get an education through programs. I feel as though I've underdeveloped my essay because I feel as though I didn't thoroughly analyze the scope of underprivileged students or kids as well as I could. Please look for any places that I could expand on. Thanks in advance.

PROMPT: Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

Every time I would pass through the hallways in my school, I see what's in store for the future. The students represent what the future will be run by. Concerning some students, I breathe a sigh of relief because I can see they'll be happy later in life through their eagerness to contribute to the community or even simply excelling in their schoolwork. Such as, that girl in theatre is going to be a Grammy-winning actress or that guy who always knows what's going on in Syria is going to be leading Congress some day. Yet, in some of today's youth, I shake my head because it's so painfully obvious that they could be doing so much more better for themselves. Whether it be by choice or by disadvantages, some of today's youth lack the ability to better themselves.

If they don't have the basic tools to thrive, society's future and the outlook of that particular student isn't looking optimistic. Some children are underprivileged, but there are those that spend their time playing video games, or texting on unnecessarily expensive phones. There's a concern within myself that children aren't paying attention to what is really important in their life which is their future. There needs to be more focus geared towards informing children of books, art, politics, and even more areas to give that child something to work towards that'll benefit themselves and their community in the future. But let's not stop there - what about opening up more programs that help students that have specific problems. Money isn't always an issue in families, but time could be because teenagers would have to cut school or drop out to take care of loved ones. Everyday, kids as young as fourteen would have to sacrifice their life to help their incapacitated parent or to even raise a child (whether it be their child or younger sibling) by themselves. Through these programs, a student could go to school activities or do their homework without worrying about their family because their family would be just fine. Ideally, every teenager and child would have a chance to live happily.

As a child that grew up without many resources to better myself, I understand how important knowledge would be to people, especially to our youth. If a child can't excel, then what's to say that their future would be promising?

Undergraduate / "A Sense of Challenge"; UT - SOP [6]

I'd like some tips or help on my essay. :) I wasn't completely clear on what to write about, so I described why I wanted to transfer while telling the readers about my personality and interests (I hoped that it might answer the prompt, but I don't know).Thanks to any replies.

Prompt: The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application. You may also want to explain unique aspects of your academic background or valued experiences you may have had that relate to your academic discipline. The statement of purpose is not meant to be a listing of accomplishments in high school or a record of your participation in school-related activities. Rather, this is your opportunity to address the admissions committee directly and to let us know more about you as an individual, in a manner that your transcripts and other application information cannot convey.

There's always been something mystical about "healing" a person. The phrase almost makes you feel like you're being warped back into a mythological age of magic. Nursing has been a dream profession of mine because of one typical reason: saving lives. Of course, there's other reasons like the chance to connect to patients or applying my love of science to my work, but helping a human live tops any list.

I took a wrong turn when I left high school. To my left, the road's sunlight was vivid and the beautiful blue birds reminded me of an old 1920's ballad. I look apprehensively to my right where the light somehow dimmed and the trees weren't decorated with their usual allure of green leaves and amiable animals. For whatever reason, I went right, probably because that furry rodent looked kind of friendly. In reality, I went to one university and didn't go to the other because I missed the deadline. I thought I'd like students and the environment in the university I chose, but there wasn't nearly as much excitement and studious behaviors as I wanted. I was surrounded by peers that wanted average, but I yearned for much more than what was on ground level - I wanted to go higher where I could go past the limits. I know at the University of Texas at Austin I'd be challenged by my peers, something I value that I haven't found yet.

The past year has taught many things in terms of invoking interest in abstract ideas. I love thinking and being a knowledgable speaker. It creates a worldly understanding that could answer questions like why and how do people behave in certain situations. Even scientific questions that ask, "How could gravity be so weak, yet so strong"? These thought-provoking questions led me to pursue being a nurse and also apply to a reputable and challenging university. I'm an incredibly hardworking and determined person when it comes to my dreams. I've studied my way into making a 4.0 GPA in my first semester and I'll continue to do so by any means and sacrifices. As cliche as it sounds, becoming a nurse means the world to me, so I would go through countless trials to show it.

There's a stage in a plant's growth called germination that I could identify myself with. Not yet a mature plant, nor a seed, but in the middle where I'm beginning to sprout. I'm realizing my ambitions as a nurse, but I need the right nurturing. A school like the University of Texas at Austin can offer me that, in exchange I'll offer my devotion to studying around the clock.