Undergraduate / 'Want to become a business woman' - transfer essay (what I can learn from life) [4]

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I always ask myself what I can learn from life, and the response that I always receive is experience. Experience is the foundation which allows me to grow, live, and survive in an all too changing, chaotic, fallible world. At times these experiences can fill the human body with feelings of achievement, satisfaction, and even suffering. Personally, I feel that experiences which content the soul are the most worthwhile of my many personal adventures in life. I feel that my experience talking with some successful business man has given me a great lesson, allows me know how the important of education.

These businessmen all very successful, they have earned a lot of money. But they all decided go back to school to re-study. They thought if they want to have more development, they have to expand their knowledge. Therefore, I choose to transfer to Stony Brook. I want to have a full education at Stony Brook, I know Stony Brook has many experienced professors and a professional academic environment, I think these will really help me in my study road.

My dream is to become a business woman. However, at present the international economical situation is very difficult. The economic crisis is hanging over lots of countries. Personally, I feel during this hard time, each country should work in concert and tide over the difficulties together. I know that at Stony Brook there are students from all 50 states and 110 foreign countries, that allows me can earlier know how to work with diffident country people, indeed know diffident country's' culture, that's good for my future life.

I do believe if I can study at Stony Brook will made me become a person who is full of passion, zeal and enthusiasm.