Undergraduate /
New and different experience; Why the summer challenge at boston university? [4]
This program equipped with itsincluding seminars, lectures and field trips ensures to stimulate our brains as well as encourage us to try new things while getting a taste of college life.
This program will help me enhance my thinking skills and besidesperhaps getting over the nervousness I might facefaced by me about being away from my family.
probably better:
Looking throughGoing through its the seminar choices I
cannot choose what interests me
the most.
Being in India where we do not have the freedom to try different fields before choosing what we are interested in.
Being in India
where we people do not have
the freedom to try
various fields before choosing what they
are interested in ?
want to do in their lives ?.
I think you should take 'being' away, as to use it you need a subject. But this means you should come up with the idea how to insert the sentence into the context.
But, I am sure that by the end of the program I will have been much more certain about what I want to study.
With an increase in the competition around the world, much of the joy of learning something new has been drained out with grades and class ranks. In this program we can actually enjoy the process of learning without being worried about exams or tests. No pressure, no expectations only the fun of learning.
I really liked this your statement.
I look forward to this experience greatly as thisit is something completely new and different from what I'm used to doing .
In my opinion you don't need 'greatly' as it is already implied in the phrase 'look forward to'
Being in contact with people around the worldfrom all over the world will educate me in a way nothing else can.
There is a saying in Sanskrit that says a student learns 25% of his education from teachers, 25% from their fellow students, 25% by studying on his own and 25% through experiences. Through this program I will be able to do all of that in just a span of 2 weeks.
Liked this part as well. But 'saying says' doesn't sound good to me, probably 'saying which states'
I do hope that, that is exactly what it did.
I think you should omit this sentence, from my point of view it doesn't really fit
In fact ever since I got to know about thisthe program , participating in it has become pretty much the only thing on my mind.So I hope it does happen. ?I will have chance to take the given opportunity ?
Overall, I liked your essay, good structure, I hope I didn't miss anything
Good luck!!!
