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Jan 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Laughter is the best medicine. Keeping everyone's happy makes us happy too [4]
There are diverse groups of humans in earth. All of the beings have diffferent quality (sounds a little weird to me, not quite sure what to do without changing the structure too much). Some are reserved whereas others are expressive.Some might be sentimental type whereas others might be full of humor . As life is too short to be sad and serious, I (you forgot to capitalize) think a good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities because it makes people around you happy and helps to move forward.
People need to act according to different circumstances. Some people always appear to be gloomy making people around them sad too.Every one wants to be around happy people and around people who have good sense of humor.For instance,I once (switched the words to make it sounds more natural) went on a tour to Muktinath. On the way the bus suddenly stopped and the driver told us that he need to repair it and it might take a day.I was already bored as it was a long journey and on the top of it I had to wait for another day.T hen there was a man who started talking to me and I found him quite interesting.H e had a good sense of humor and I even didn' t know how the time passed. S o a person with a good sense of humor can make other people happy. F urthermore, it'll also help us to move forward. I t's helpful (only one "l") in different steps like during a job interview, the interviewer might get interested because of good sense of humor.T he person can also deal gleefully with the customers and make them happy and thus flourish the business.E ven in medical field, it is required to deal with patient without being rude. M oreover it is most for teachers. M ost of the students get bored attending an hour of lecture, so a teacher with good sense of humor can get attention of the student by saying jokes relevant to subject. T he teacher might be the best one for the student (odd phrasing here too).
T o sum up, laughter is the best medicine. K eeping everyone happy makes us happy too. S mile and let other person smile.
Not bad, but you really have to watch out for capitalization, and grammar in general. Some of the sentences were oddly phrased, but still conveyed the message. Good job though!
There are diverse groups of humans in earth. All of the beings have diffferent quality (sounds a little weird to me, not quite sure what to do without changing the structure too much). Some are reserved whereas others are expressive.Some might be sentimental type whereas others might be full of humor . As life is too short to be sad and serious, I (you forgot to capitalize) think a good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities because it makes people around you happy and helps to move forward.
People need to act according to different circumstances. Some people always appear to be gloomy making people around them sad too.Every one wants to be around happy people and around people who have good sense of humor.For instance,I once (switched the words to make it sounds more natural) went on a tour to Muktinath. On the way the bus suddenly stopped and the driver told us that he need to repair it and it might take a day.I was already bored as it was a long journey and on the top of it I had to wait for another day.T hen there was a man who started talking to me and I found him quite interesting.H e had a good sense of humor and I even didn' t know how the time passed. S o a person with a good sense of humor can make other people happy. F urthermore, it'll also help us to move forward. I t's helpful (only one "l") in different steps like during a job interview, the interviewer might get interested because of good sense of humor.T he person can also deal gleefully with the customers and make them happy and thus flourish the business.E ven in medical field, it is required to deal with patient without being rude. M oreover it is most for teachers. M ost of the students get bored attending an hour of lecture, so a teacher with good sense of humor can get attention of the student by saying jokes relevant to subject. T he teacher might be the best one for the student (odd phrasing here too).
T o sum up, laughter is the best medicine. K eeping everyone happy makes us happy too. S mile and let other person smile.
Not bad, but you really have to watch out for capitalization, and grammar in general. Some of the sentences were oddly phrased, but still conveyed the message. Good job though!