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Laughter is the best medicine. Keeping everyone's happy makes us happy too


anjali1 1 / 1  
Jan 11, 2013   #1
There are diverse group of human in earth. All of the beings have diffferent quality. Some are reserved whereas other are expressive.Some might be sentimental type whereas others might be full of humour. As life is too short to be sad and serious, i think a good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities because it makes people around you happy and helps to move forward.

People need to act according to different circumstances. Some people always appear to be gloomy making people around them sad too.Every one wants to be around happy people and around people who have good sense of humor.For instance once i went on a tour to Muktinath. On the way the bus suddenly stopped and the driver told us that he need to repair it and it might take a day.i was already bored as it was a long journey and on the top of i have to wait for another day.then there was a man who started talking to me and i found him quite interesting.he had a good sense of humor and i even didnt know how the time passed. so a person with good sense of humor can make other people happy. furthermore, it'll also help us to move forward. it's helpfull in different steps like during a job interview, interviewer might get interested because of good sense of humor.the person can also deal gleefully with the custmors and make them happy and thus flourish the business.even in medical field, it is required to deal with patient without being rude. moreover it is most for teachers.most of the students get bored attending an hour of lecture, so a teacher with good sense of humor can get attention of the student by saying jokes relevant to subject.the teacher might be the best one for the student.

to sum up, laughter is the best medicine. keeping everyone's happy makes us happy too. smile and let other person smile.

Aquile 1 / 1 1  
Jan 11, 2013   #2
There are diverse groups of humans in earth. All of the beings have diffferent quality (sounds a little weird to me, not quite sure what to do without changing the structure too much). Some are reserved whereas others are expressive.Some might be sentimental type whereas others might be full of humor . As life is too short to be sad and serious, I (you forgot to capitalize) think a good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities because it makes people around you happy and helps to move forward.

People need to act according to different circumstances. Some people always appear to be gloomy making people around them sad too.Every one wants to be around happy people and around people who have good sense of humor.For instance,I once (switched the words to make it sounds more natural) went on a tour to Muktinath. On the way the bus suddenly stopped and the driver told us that he need to repair it and it might take a day.I was already bored as it was a long journey and on the top of it I had to wait for another day.T hen there was a man who started talking to me and I found him quite interesting.H e had a good sense of humor and I even didn' t know how the time passed. S o a person with a good sense of humor can make other people happy. F urthermore, it'll also help us to move forward. I t's helpful (only one "l") in different steps like during a job interview, the interviewer might get interested because of good sense of humor.T he person can also deal gleefully with the customers and make them happy and thus flourish the business.E ven in medical field, it is required to deal with patient without being rude. M oreover it is most for teachers. M ost of the students get bored attending an hour of lecture, so a teacher with good sense of humor can get attention of the student by saying jokes relevant to subject. T he teacher might be the best one for the student (odd phrasing here too).

T o sum up, laughter is the best medicine. K eeping everyone happy makes us happy too. S mile and let other person smile.

Not bad, but you really have to watch out for capitalization, and grammar in general. Some of the sentences were oddly phrased, but still conveyed the message. Good job though!
jorgearmando18 8 / 32 9  
Jan 11, 2013   #3
There are diverse group of human in earth. All of the beings have diffferent quality. Some are reserved whereas other are expressive.Some might be sentimental type whereas others might be full of humour.

My advice here is to link a little more the sentences so you wont have to do actually so many. Is like if I was putting. a sentence every five words. it won't sound good. it won't sound powerful. you know what I mean? and I see that problem very often in your essay, if you correct that I think that it will sound better

I was already bored as it was a long journey and on the top of it I had to wait for another day
since? I believe that it sounds better, work a little bit on word choice

Furthermore, it'll also help us to move forward. it will my English teacher gave me the advice of not using contractions when writing this type of essays, is about style, is not wrong, but it sounds better.

It's helpful in different steps, like during a job interview,

the interviewer might get interested because of good sense of humor.The person can also deal gleefully with the customers and make them happy and thus flourish the business.

You were talking about a job interview and ended up talking about some kind of customers, customers of where? are you talking about a store? specify that. It sounds like if you had jump a part of the story.

can get attention of the student(s) since you were talking in plural.

Another thing, it would be good if you specify what is this for? a common high school or college essay? scholarship? application for college? what was the prompt? if you specify things like that we can help you a little more accurately

Very best of luck, Jorge
OP anjali1 1 / 1  
Jan 25, 2013   #4
thank you. I was preparing to toefl and i already took exam.I got 24 in writing. :)


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