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nicolettec18   
Jan 16, 2013
Undergraduate / Football/ Psychology Courses/Class sizes - Emory Unique qualities -Transfer [6]

Prompt: What are the unique qualities of Emory University, and the specific school(s) to which you are applying (Emory College of Arts and Sciences, Oxford College, or both), that make you want to become part of Emory University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

COMPLETELY REDONE!

An even balance between classroom education and field research is not always easy to come by as a psychology major, yet it is offered at Emory year after year. The Emory College of Arts and Sciences not only offers degrees in Psychology and Linguistics, which are both interests of mine, but a joint major program that sets it apart from any other school in the south. The program offers an education in both fields and a connection between the two that may not have been expressed if I just double majored. The academics offered at Emory are a cut above the rest and it does not stop there. The Psychology department in the College of Arts and Sciences has multiple research opportunities that I want to immerse myself in year round. The SIRE Program that is offers extensive research opportunities to undergraduates during the academic year and in the summer. With the research that Emory offers I can get a hands on experience in psychological research and have a more complete understanding of my major. In addition I am not limited to one research program a year and that is so important to me because I am enthusiastic to learn and the more experience I can get the better. Emory offers the intellectual experience that I want my college years to consist of and I do not see me getting the same opportunities anywhere else. No other university has such a strong sense of balance in education in and outside of the classroom and that is a quality that separates the Eagles from any other bird. I know I am missing out by not attending Emory University and in my heart I know I am meant to not just fly but soar.

PLEASE ANY COMMENTS OR CORRECTIONS TO MAKE THIS BETTER!!!
nicolettec18   
Jan 13, 2013
Undergraduate / Track and Field; Extracurricular Common App Portion. [6]

the only thing is i have a 1000 character limit and what i have written is that so i cant really add anymore. Do you think i should take out something to give a background or leave it as is?
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / College experience and becoming an Eagle; Emory Transfer Student [NEW]

All of my life my parents have told me that I should become a lawyer. I like to argue with them so they assumed I should at least make money for arguing with someone else. Coming into my first semester in college I thought that law school was my ultimate goal and instantly declared legal studies as my major. I was only interested in becoming a cooperate attorney so legal studies was an ideal major for me. A week later I added psychology as another major because it was an area of study that really interested me. After a few days in my first business law class I began to realize the disinterest I had for the cases and ideologies that revolve around corporate law. Suddenly the idea of being a corporate or any type of lawyer did not satisfy me. I wanted to study something that would allow me to genuinely help people not read over cases about contracts and promissory estoppel. Over the Christmas break I spoke to my aunt who was a therapist and realized that it may be the route for me. I began researching careers and clinical psychology instantly stood out to me. I researched the psychology major that the University of Miami offered and found it to not be as intensive as I had hoped and considered double majoring with another area of study that would compliment psychology. Once again I found myself on Google looking for an answer and came up empty-handed. I was talking to my friend randomly about my current situation and he happens to go to Emory and told me to consider the joint major of psychology and linguistics. To be honest I had never thought of linguistics before since it is not offered at the University of Miami and had no idea what to expect. On the Emory website I read about the program and instantly fell in love, it seemed perfect. The program offered me two majors that I could put to use as a clinical psychologist and if i found myself longing for a good argument helpful in law school. My reasons for transferring to Emory are almost entirely academic. I want to study psychology and Emory has the program that will ideally broaden and strengthen my studies in not one but two areas. On the less academic and more social side I did grow up Georgia and I do miss it and often get homesick in Miami. The college atmosphere here is not one that appeals to me. I wanted a more serious feel on campus instead on the laid-back aroma that clings to my university. Emory offers everything and more that I want in a college experience and I know that my heart is set on becoming and Eagle.
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / I was an international volunteer @ Jamaican Spring Break;Common App, Extracurricular [10]

I really enjoyed your essay it was very personal and your experience as a whole was very unique. I do think you should find a way to make it clear bella is a little girl and that you were doing volunteer work. You don't have to come out and blankly state it but there should be something there that clarifies the entire situation.
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / Program range/ exchange student experience; Why Reed ? [3]

Your essay is very personal which is a good thing and I like how you give an intimate look into your family and you financial situation and then talk about how Reed will help you. The quote was also a very nice tough I just don't know if the placement of it is appropriate so you may want to look into that. You give solid reasons for why you are choosing Reed and that is very powerful. Overall I think it is a very good essay. Good luck!
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / Track and Field; Extracurricular Common App Portion. [6]

In high school track the most important thing to me. My senior year I was given the privilege of being one of the two track captains for the girls team and second semester my world revolved around track. I led warm-up drills at practice and track meets and served as an example for younger runners to follow. Our season started late January and went until the middle of May and as the time went by our track program started forming into a team. With a position of power comes responsibility and I learned about what it takes to be a leader and stand strong when others cannot. As a track captain I was allowed to explore and define myself as a leader. As our season drew to close and the teams focus shifted to the state meet it was a stressful time as a leader. The other captains and I had to constantly remind the team to push through the pain and stay focused through practice. We qualified about twenty girls to go to the state track meet and as we ran our last track meet of the season I felt so accomplished that with my help the team had come so far.

Any suggestions to improve?
Is the ending good enough?
The word limit hindered me so any suggestions on how to say more with less words will be much appreciated!
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / My Guitar; Common App-"extracurricular activities or work" [7]

I think that you should change the first sentence something about it sets the whole paper off on the wrong foot in my opinion. I do think the essay has good point though I just think that you should make it more personal and not say "one" as much it is about you and no one else. The reader wants to hear only about you and your experience so I feel like yours is to general in the beginning. Maybe you can focus on one particular time when using the guitar helped you express yourself or when you first started using music to say things that you lips could not. I hope this helps. Good luck!
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Peer Advocate' - (Applying to Emory and UM as a Transfer Student) [5]

I go to University of Miami and I think that one thing this school really appreciates is diversity and interesting. You should simply add a personal touch to your story to make it more appealing to someone's emotions so they can actually feel how much you have helped student through this program and in turn how it has helped you. The more personal the better because it will set your application apart. Good luck!
nicolettec18   
Jan 12, 2013
Undergraduate / Football/ Psychology Courses/Class sizes - Emory Unique qualities -Transfer [6]

Prompt: What are the unique qualities of Emory University, and the specific school(s) to which you are applying (Emory College of Arts and Sciences, Oxford College, or both), that make you want to become part of Emory University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

Growing up in Georgia Emory was often heard in passing and when my senior year of high school came around I started to hear Emory more and more. As a naive 17 year old I through Emory on the back burner because I only wanted to apply to schools that had well-known football programs because I thought that was what I wanted, academics although important stood equal with my desire for Saturday college football games. I did not even bother to apply to Emory and upon starting college in the fall I realized how quickly my interest in the college football atmosphere dwindled and immediately began searching for something more. I had already started to change my mind about my major and started looking for schools that had strong psychology and business programs as I was deciding between the two. Suddenly Emory appeared in the back of my mind and I started to research the institution. I took a virtual tour online and started to fall in love with the beautiful campus and gorgeous marble buildings. As if I was not already head over heels I looked into their undergraduate psychology program and could barely contain myself when I saw they offered something my school did not, a joint major in psychology and linguistics. Emory was giving me an offer I could not refuse, my heart was set into studying psychology and I had been looking for another major that would complement it and I had found that and an inviting community all at Emory. I called my fellow classmate from high school who is currently attending Emory and asked him about the school and what he told me made realize I needed to be here. The class sizes were small and there were countless opportunities that would be presented to me from the knowledgable and caring professors, the Woodruff library, and the writing center to the city of Atlanta encompassing Emory just waiting to be explored. On top of that having traveled in the past the diverse student body would create the perfect atmosphere for me to thrive not only academically but socially. There is no doubt in my mind that Emory University gives all of itself to its students and I cannot help but feel as though I am missing out the longer I wait to attend this fine establishment.

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I need to get accepted as a transfer it has become my dream so please help make it a reality!
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