Writing Feedback / Should married women give up their jobs to look after their children ? [3]

1) Paragraph 1 "Sentiment" not "sentiments"
2) Paragraph 2 "at doing" not "in doing"
3) "cronies" might not be the right word
4) cannot is one word not "can not"
5) the help of fathers? (add question mark)
6) "undergoes" not "under gone", add question mark
Overall it is a rather simplistic essay. I would strengthen it by adding complexity of ideas, and topic sentences that separate different ideas. Example:

In the modern era women can be as, or more successful than men in the medical field.

It gives women confidence to support themselves in the case of a a husband dying .

etc.

And then target your essay toward the topic sentence.