Writing Feedback / IELTS ; What factors contribute to job satisfication? [3]

QuestionïźšAs most people spend a major part of their adult life at work,job satisfication is an important element of individual wellbeing.
What factors contribute to job satisfication?
How realistic is the expectation of job satisfication for all workers?

MY ESSAY:
With increasing adults throw themselves in full-time jobs, workplace has become the one where they stay for the longest time; therefore sense of job satisfication will raise largely attention form the whole society. In my essay, I will explore the possible parts of job satisfication ,as well as how realistic the expectation is.

Even though there are plenty of factors lead to perfect job,the most direct one is fair rewards, which is the best motivation of employees. Let suppose that if a worker makes huge sacrifices and commitments to company in the absence of adequate prizes, negative attitudes will ensue, not to mention job satisfication. Further, to provide a friendly pleasant working environment is an another essential part of job satisfication. From our own experience, it is easier to secure a sense of belonging with surrounded by exquisite facilities and considerate colleagues. On top of that, to elevate standard of employee's wellbeing is also rely on effective management. Managers are expected to assign workload in the light of the ability everyone possess, since individuals would like to perform challenging tasks to confirm their own values.

However, if we look at the real job market, expectations mentioned above are far beyond the reach of some people in certain fields. An evident example is street cleaner who bears a massive workload, but indeed earns meager salaries. Meanwhile, the notion of "occupational disease" is increasingly raising attention from society, as lack of comfortable facilities and environments has been a pervasive situation in some workplaces.

Overall, there seems to be a long way to go to enhance happiness of staff member throughout the whole society. Yet, it is not unrealistic if all relevant divisions shoulder their responsibilities for the sake of employee's interests.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Children should learn science in school or not? [3]

topic:some people believe that children should learn science in school,others think that it is not necessary to include science in general education. Do you agree or disagree?

Through the ages,people benefit a lot from the progress of science, which make a necessity of introducing science in school education.while others support the contrary,it is my personal belief that,to a large extent,basic science knowledge is essential for the further development of children.

There seems to be a evident tendency that science course is increasingly popular among educational institutions and public schools. Obviously, the main factor due to this trend is science as basic education lay a solid groundwork for other sophisticated subjects,such as biology or physic, which involve numerous principals and laws originating from science. Moreover, if students had no access to acquire science knowledge from schools, they would misunderstand the reality of science;since it is awashed with excessive false information about science,be it on newspaper,TV or Internet. On top of that, school education is the prime opportunity to encourage and spirit children to explore science; therefore,school education would play a overriding role in fostering elits in field of science.

However, there is no getting around the fact that some students rarely have interest in science. A telling example to illustrate this point is artists, who have neither talents nor ambitions in this respect. Yet, it is undeniable that basic science would enhance profound understanding in no matter which sphere, even in art.

On the whole, with the importance of science has been attached to our education, I would be hard-impresses to imagine that children are able to be better-rounded in absence of science course.