Psychologic
Feb 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / (IELTS ESSAY) effect of mobile phones on young children. [12]
In this sentance: "In this super-connected world, mobile phone serves an important role in the field of communication."
You said "Mobile phone serves" where it should have been rephrased as "mobile phones serve."
'Mobile phone' should be plural, since you are talking about them in such a manner. When it is plural, that means 'serve' shouldn't have the 's'.
I'd consider going back and fixing this, as it appears in many sentences.
Wonderful essay, nevertheless!
In this sentance: "In this super-connected world, mobile phone serves an important role in the field of communication."
You said "Mobile phone serves" where it should have been rephrased as "mobile phones serve."
'Mobile phone' should be plural, since you are talking about them in such a manner. When it is plural, that means 'serve' shouldn't have the 's'.
I'd consider going back and fixing this, as it appears in many sentences.
Wonderful essay, nevertheless!