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Mar 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: spread of multinational companies is good or bad? Good [6]
thank you very much all for your feedback.
dumi I know that it's less than 250 word but i was try to practice in time. i don't know should i consider the time while i am practicing for the IELTS. or i just have to lean how to write a good paragraph without considering the time.
i rewrite the paragraph with 250 word put without considering the time can you please correct it and if there is a week sentence. how can i rephrase it to make it strong.
The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone. Do you agree or disagree?
Globalization is the integration of economics and societies all over the world. many people believe that the spread of multinational companies which is the result of globalization can produce a positive effect to everyone. However, there are some people how believes that the spread of these multinational companies will cause a negative impact on the country.In my opinion, I totally agree that the separate of multinational companies will be beneficial for everyone.
To begin with, the spread of multinational companies result in introducing new products that suite respective cultures.for example, if there is a food company which sell snack, if this company have multinational employee as China, India and from America. this cooperation of many people from different counties will produce a tasty snack which is accepted by almost all the nations. On the other hand, let us suppose that this company have only an Indian employee, imagine what kind of snack the will produce. is it a kary? is the taste of this product will be acceptable by Chines or Korean?
Moreover, the spread of multinational companies will reduce the cost as a result it will increase the profit. An instance, many Europe companies built their factory in India and China because the employee cost are more less so they can get more profit.
In addition, the spread of multinational companies will improve the economic of the country. lets take India as example, remember the economic of it before many year and compare it with toddy after building many foreign companies. the compassion with out doubt will give as a clear vision about the importance of the multinational companies.
In conclusion, As I believe that spread of multinational companies will improve the economic I strongly believe that it's produce positive effects to everyone.
thank you very much all for your feedback.
dumi I know that it's less than 250 word but i was try to practice in time. i don't know should i consider the time while i am practicing for the IELTS. or i just have to lean how to write a good paragraph without considering the time.
i rewrite the paragraph with 250 word put without considering the time can you please correct it and if there is a week sentence. how can i rephrase it to make it strong.
The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects to everyone. Do you agree or disagree?
Globalization is the integration of economics and societies all over the world. many people believe that the spread of multinational companies which is the result of globalization can produce a positive effect to everyone. However, there are some people how believes that the spread of these multinational companies will cause a negative impact on the country.In my opinion, I totally agree that the separate of multinational companies will be beneficial for everyone.
To begin with, the spread of multinational companies result in introducing new products that suite respective cultures.for example, if there is a food company which sell snack, if this company have multinational employee as China, India and from America. this cooperation of many people from different counties will produce a tasty snack which is accepted by almost all the nations. On the other hand, let us suppose that this company have only an Indian employee, imagine what kind of snack the will produce. is it a kary? is the taste of this product will be acceptable by Chines or Korean?
Moreover, the spread of multinational companies will reduce the cost as a result it will increase the profit. An instance, many Europe companies built their factory in India and China because the employee cost are more less so they can get more profit.
In addition, the spread of multinational companies will improve the economic of the country. lets take India as example, remember the economic of it before many year and compare it with toddy after building many foreign companies. the compassion with out doubt will give as a clear vision about the importance of the multinational companies.
In conclusion, As I believe that spread of multinational companies will improve the economic I strongly believe that it's produce positive effects to everyone.
