Essays / Admission essay for undergraduate Mechanincal Engineering program [5]

thank you again for the advices you gave me ,

i think those are my PS , i just wrote them from my mind , i mean i don`t have idea about the difference between PS and POS , can you just direct me how to use each of these statement in my essay and when i should put them , after gathering information about how an admission essay should be , i guess i have to put my essay as it comes from my mind in a very formal way , i mean i wanna avoid copy past because they will find out as i was told , , just please give me kind of map to write from beginning to end if you could , anyways thank you very much for the answers you provided to me , and for devoting from your time to help people like me , i appreciate that

Essays / Admission essay for undergraduate Mechanincal Engineering program [5]

HI dumi ,

thank you very much for your answer , i just start writing but honestly i am not perfect , and English is not my first language , i hope anyone who can help , just leave your comments , just check the meaning of my writing and tell me if i am going in the best direction , i did not finish it yet , i prefer to get your advices to boost me completing this task , again thank you very much , hope to read your asnwers and comment asap

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When I think about studying ,I spend hours thinking about how to make it back and continue my education in a prestigious university , not only for reputation , it is also a good opportunity for me as a future engineer to improve my knowledge , learn in a very professional way and get the skills that engineers need in this era to be more productive , more competitive ,and also a problem solvers ,

My passion for engineering kept growing since I was a little kid , I was very curious about how stuffs work , games , cars ,engines , whatever a thing that I found , i collected a lot of pieces from different damaged devices like radios , televisions ,mechanical machines , and I tried to make stuffs out of them , in the meantime my father was a mechanic however I had a chance to see him fixing engines and mechanical systems , in that period of time my love for mechanic came to life , every time I saw him fixing an engine , I was thinking about the magic that makes those separate parts when put together make that piece of technology running . in that period of time , I was looking to it as a human being , inhale and exhale ,work, movement , in the other side air intake ,exhaust and work production , and the question that came to my mind was :how a genius that created this machine was ! That what inspired me to mechanical engineering . It was really the best period I lived in my life because it was a hobby first and it increased my passion, curiosity and love for mechanical engineering. When I got my baccalaureate degree in my country, I had a chance to register in a polytechnic school that is the best in the field of engineering , it was not ranked as Harvard or MIT , but anyway at least it has mechanical engineering , unfortunately I did not graduate from that school because I had a chance to immigrate to the us , however I changed my plan and took risk , I quit studying there and I came to the us with big hopes and expectations to get better education and high level of study in engineering .

I really believe that a high level of education is a key factor in the career of an engineer, getting high skills to be a successful engineer in mechanical engineering starts by studying in a university that offers this high level of education In the field, up to date program that allows a student to get a worth knowledge, and helps him achieving his dreams in mechanical engineering. ....

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