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mystery200   
Mar 3, 2009
Undergraduate / Technology for ESL Students [6]

That is already a thesis statement, but you need a focused statement. You may want to restate that thesis statement to something like, "With the use of technology, ESL student's progress in learning would be better, specially if they used blogs."
mystery200   
Mar 3, 2009
Writing Feedback / Reading - My favorite subject essay [6]

This is my essay the assignment was :What is your favorite subject? Why? Explain what excites you about this subject.

Reading is my favorite subject at school. It is the class that I take the most interest in.

I am in the only gifted class at Edison. We learn at the speed that is just right for me. In all of my other classes, I am always ahead of what the class is doing and it frustrates me. I do not want to go ahead of the teacher, but at the same time

it is really boring going at a slow pace. Mrs. Parmer, my reading teacher, does not assign homework for the rest of the lesson if she does not finish teaching it. In other classes I am always getting homework because of the slow pase the class goes at.

I feel like I am learning the most in my reading class because we get so much done in class. Everyday we learn about something different which keeps me interested because I am not reviewing the same thing over and over again. I do not ever remember

a time when the pace was slow in reading.

During the year, all the assignments I got helped me. There was always a proper reason for the kind of work we got. All reading assignments got me thinking. It was never simply taking notes or just reading out of a certain text book. Mrs. Parmer thought of creative ways to teach us and it always kept me interested.

Reading class is a place where I am encouraged in many ways. Whenever we turn in our book logs Mrs. Parmer encourages us to read more by saying how many minutes we've read that week. This makes everyone want to read more so that Mrs. Parmer can say a really high number when she tells the whole class how much they've read that week. Another way Mrs. Parmer encourages us is by passing out peppermints whenever we take a test. This was her way of saying "good luck" without giving us any pressure.

The way reading is set up is wonderful. Not only did I learn a lot, I have experienced so much through Mrs. Parmer's teachings.
mystery200   
Mar 3, 2009
Writing Feedback / Jame Joyce's Portrait [11]

Good job!! Seems like you did well, but you may want to break it up into different paragraphs.
mystery200   
Mar 1, 2009
Writing Feedback / Essay on a personal challenge at school [5]

This is my essay there were instructions except to write an essay describing a personal challenge I faced at school and how I dealt with it.

At school, my challenge was being a sixth grader in a seventh grade math class. I felt like an outcast, but I had to deal with the situation.

In the beginning of the year, all the six graders were required to take a math test in order to see if you were eligible to get into the seventh grade math class.

The test was on sixth grade math, which made it easy for me because I had already learned sixth grade math last year in my gifted and talented class at Stratton.

A few days later after I took the test, I was told by my homeroom teacher, Mrs. Biddle, to go to the computer lab with a few other kids because I had passed the first part of the test.

I was to take the second part of the test, which I also had to pass in order to get into seventh grade math. I ended up getting a phone call home saying that I had also passed the second part of the test and was eligible to get

into seventh grade math, but I needed my parent's permission first. My parents gladly gave me their permission.

At first, I was excited for a challenge. I would not have to redo everything I had already learned. But all my excitement crashed when I saw all the unknown faces. None of my friends had

gotten into seventh grade math with me. I was a lone wolf who did not know what to do. Mrs. Robinson, my new math teacher, assigned me to a seat next to a girl who was really friendly.

Her name was Suzie, and she was my first flicker of hope. She introduced herself and I returned the favor. We got the know each other and even exchanged emails. Pretty soon, everyone

was friendly to me.

My social challenge was over, but I still had trouble catching up on what the seventh graders were doing. Since school had already started for a couple weeks, I had gotten used to the sixth grade system.

The way my new math teacher's system worked was totally different. I realized that in seventh grade, I would be having a lot more homework. My friends and I often do our homework together, but they always

got done before me. This was because of my math homework. Whenever I showed my friends how much math homework I had, they would go, "wow". Even on my first day of seventh grade math, I had a to take

a quiz. The rest of the class had already learned this lesson, but I had not. I tried my best, but most of it was very confusing. I had a pretty hard time trying to catch up. I worked alone at home trying to learn the

lessons I had missed and I worked out my schedule so I could have time to finish all of my homework.
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