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Joined: Mar 3, 2009
Last Post: Mar 30, 2009
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chubbybear   
Mar 30, 2009
Writing Feedback / Some Causes of Stress -- work, family, finance. [3]

In our modern technological century, stress become a popular situation to all of us. There are many reasons for this. First, the most common reason is the pressure of work. when working people have to face up to much pressure such as : too little time for too much work, too much more difficult tasks given. This makes us stressed easily. Second, depression is allso a remarkable reason. loosing a person or a pet who you love leading your disappointments and sadness. althouigh children always a source of stress for parents, when the child dies, the stress is overwhelming. Finally, another reason of no less importance is finance. Some people try to earn more money, have a big house or car, overwhelmed by their demands. Some other people stressed by a loss of income or mounting credit card debt. Overall, gaining knowlodge of the leading causes of stress is essential. Use that knowldege to keep a heathy life.
chubbybear   
Mar 25, 2009
Undergraduate / 'A hope for a wonderful learning experience' - college entrance essay (UCF)? [8]

Another pertinent thing about the University of Central Florida is that the

staff deeply cares for its students, characteristic through their persistent and constant up scaling of the school, this has

highly influenced meimpressed on me/ influenced on me . University of Central Florida is a place of opportunities which concludes to my decision of applying

your for such a wonderful University.. [/quote]

come on friend,
chubbybear   
Mar 25, 2009
Scholarship / Expanding my knowledge; Scholarship (the United World Colleges) [6]

[quote=stefan]I want to be successful in all my goals and push myself to complete them, which are to constantly keep increasing skills in my hobbies which include (martial arts tricking??) and bodybuilding, and education.

i think in this part you used a too complex sentence. This makes reader find difficult to understand what you really want to say. instead, you can you " present participle" to replace relative clause which will make your sentence more academic. for example : you can write:

I want to be success in all my goals and put myselt to complete them, which constantly keeps increasing my skills in my own hobbies including martial arts tricking, bodybuilding and education.

In genergal i see your writing is quite good!
come on friend,i hope you can recieve that scholarship.
chubbybear   
Mar 3, 2009
Writing Feedback / Essay to Compare your Two Teachers [10]

Unshella, i still not complete my writing. it still not has a conclusion sentence. i got stuck in finding the way to end it. can you suggest me ?
chubbybear   
Mar 3, 2009
Writing Feedback / Essay to Compare your Two Teachers [10]

My English teacher and my Maths teacher are the two teachers who i admire most. They have commons in many respects, but one striking difference between them impress much on me.Firstly, they are both enthusiastic. My English teacher always tries his best to help us with studying English, especially, learning to speaking frequently. My Maths teacher, likewise, willingly answers our question anytime we ask even when we are out of class. He even create an email so that we can send our question about Maths to this. Secondly, both of them have a good sense of humor. For instance, my English teacher always starts a lesson with a funny story or a quiz so as to attract our attention to his lecture. In the same way, my Maths teacher often tell us a piece of funny story to help us relax when we feel tired or stressed. However, there is one typical difference between them is their attitudes to our studying. My English teacher is very easy, he can easily forgive for our mistakes and remind us not repeat it. On the other hand, my Maths teacher is very strict to us. He will never forgive us if we makes mistakes. Once I got traffic jam and came class late for about 10 minutes and he did not let me come in. He gave a rule that " no one can come in class after him".
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