wordsnyworld
Apr 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / "Only once one has known real sadness can one feel true happiness" [3]
parthasarathy17
NUMBER 1
" This quite explains the fact that only true experience with sadness can lead you to feel the originality in the happiness. "
That part can be written as "only when one experiences true sadness can he feel happiness in its true meaning"
it is only a suggestion because i feel this gives your paragraph more intensity.
NUMBER 2
There are many examples which further prove my point. I would like to bring in the quote "failure is a stepping stone to success".
instead of saying 'i would like to bring in the quote' you can say, 'For example,the quotation,"failure is a stepping stone to success".
Again, just a suggestion.
all in alll, the paragraph is great and gets your point across to the reader...
MUCH LOVE <3,
VANI :)
parthasarathy17
NUMBER 1
" This quite explains the fact that only true experience with sadness can lead you to feel the originality in the happiness. "
That part can be written as "only when one experiences true sadness can he feel happiness in its true meaning"
it is only a suggestion because i feel this gives your paragraph more intensity.
NUMBER 2
There are many examples which further prove my point. I would like to bring in the quote "failure is a stepping stone to success".
instead of saying 'i would like to bring in the quote' you can say, 'For example,the quotation,"failure is a stepping stone to success".
Again, just a suggestion.
all in alll, the paragraph is great and gets your point across to the reader...
MUCH LOVE <3,
VANI :)
