pohui88
Apr 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / Mr. Heng taught me the value of HARDWORKING; My favorite TEACHER [7]
Should this essay better? I try to work on all suggest you give me...
Mr. Heng is forty-two,but he does not look a day over thirty, he is muscular and well-built. He is tall ,I am just half of his size.He has a tanned complexion. He always sport a crew-cut,as if it has a special meaning for him. Mr Heng is the person who influences me the most. He taught me the value of hardworking from the day one of our meeting on the tuition center. He was able to transform my personality from a lazy one to a more dynamic and hardworking one.His influence help me earn the highest score in Science, the subject that he teach me.
Mr Heng live just downstair. When I screw up with my study I would drop by his house and ask for help. He is indeed a good teacher,for instance he is happy and pleased to my visit.He even would offer me a meal when I pay a visit to him. Mr. Heng is also a best friend for me. He is willing to share his story and experience with me.Whenever I got into trouble with my parents, I would turn to him for his advice.He would listen without condemning me but at the same time, he helps me see my parents' point of view.Whenever I am bored, he would engage me into some jokes or games. He is a live wire to the students, he often crack joke on his lesson.I love the way he teaches us,so I never absent his class.
He goes jogging everyday.Sometimes, he is annoy,he always tells me not to eat all the junk food.He would demand me to exercise with him every morning. What a gracious to me... But I really appreciate to him sometimes.He regards me as his son since he does not have a son. I would never forget about him regardless how far we are drifted away.
Mr.Heng has been a great influence in my life and I am very fortunate to have such a great teacher.
Should this essay better? I try to work on all suggest you give me...
Mr. Heng is forty-two,but he does not look a day over thirty, he is muscular and well-built. He is tall ,I am just half of his size.He has a tanned complexion. He always sport a crew-cut,as if it has a special meaning for him. Mr Heng is the person who influences me the most. He taught me the value of hardworking from the day one of our meeting on the tuition center. He was able to transform my personality from a lazy one to a more dynamic and hardworking one.His influence help me earn the highest score in Science, the subject that he teach me.
Mr Heng live just downstair. When I screw up with my study I would drop by his house and ask for help. He is indeed a good teacher,for instance he is happy and pleased to my visit.He even would offer me a meal when I pay a visit to him. Mr. Heng is also a best friend for me. He is willing to share his story and experience with me.Whenever I got into trouble with my parents, I would turn to him for his advice.He would listen without condemning me but at the same time, he helps me see my parents' point of view.Whenever I am bored, he would engage me into some jokes or games. He is a live wire to the students, he often crack joke on his lesson.I love the way he teaches us,so I never absent his class.
He goes jogging everyday.Sometimes, he is annoy,he always tells me not to eat all the junk food.He would demand me to exercise with him every morning. What a gracious to me... But I really appreciate to him sometimes.He regards me as his son since he does not have a son. I would never forget about him regardless how far we are drifted away.
Mr.Heng has been a great influence in my life and I am very fortunate to have such a great teacher.
