dirkhuibers
Apr 27, 2013
dirkhuibers
Apr 25, 2013
Letters / International experience in architecture; motivation / cover letter [3]
hello,
as I am not a native english speaker i am wondering if you could look at the spelling / structure and overall message of my motivation letter!
Dear _____,
As a recently graduated architecture student who is hungry for meaningful experience within an excellent international company I am exited to apply for the internship program that runs from September 2013 to September 2014.
I have discovered this opening on your website which I check frequently for inspiration because of your projects fascinating synthesis of theory, design and practice.
My contribution to your company can be made at this intersection. Due to my, international experience in architecture + construction combined with a passion for philosophy I have acquired a multi-perspective approach to design, which enables me to think critically and find original / informed solutions to architectural problems.
This position is right for me at this stage of my career because I love the way that (company) views architecture as the embodiment of social interactions and actualizes these relationships without compromising the original concept. It is exactly this actualization process that I have not got to experience yet in my successful academic life and I am exited to learn this trade at (company)!
My resume with contact information and portfolio underlining my academic credentials are attached together with this application letter for your reference. Should you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me any time.
Thank you for your time and consideration in reviewing my materials.
I look forward to hearing the (hopefully good) news from you.
Sincerely,
hello,
as I am not a native english speaker i am wondering if you could look at the spelling / structure and overall message of my motivation letter!
Dear _____,
As a recently graduated architecture student who is hungry for meaningful experience within an excellent international company I am exited to apply for the internship program that runs from September 2013 to September 2014.
I have discovered this opening on your website which I check frequently for inspiration because of your projects fascinating synthesis of theory, design and practice.
My contribution to your company can be made at this intersection. Due to my, international experience in architecture + construction combined with a passion for philosophy I have acquired a multi-perspective approach to design, which enables me to think critically and find original / informed solutions to architectural problems.
This position is right for me at this stage of my career because I love the way that (company) views architecture as the embodiment of social interactions and actualizes these relationships without compromising the original concept. It is exactly this actualization process that I have not got to experience yet in my successful academic life and I am exited to learn this trade at (company)!
My resume with contact information and portfolio underlining my academic credentials are attached together with this application letter for your reference. Should you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me any time.
Thank you for your time and consideration in reviewing my materials.
I look forward to hearing the (hopefully good) news from you.
Sincerely,
dirkhuibers
Apr 25, 2013
Book Reports / Need help with Oedipus drama research essay. [2]
Hey shaddyraddy,
If you want to expand your essay, it might work to introduce Oedipus in a more general way (he comes from greek mythologie etc.) so that the reader who is unfamiliar with the subject understands your thesis. Furthermore, you could give a few examples when a statement is made to avoid assumptions. + you don't always say that you are giving an example.
According to Aristotle, the ideal tragic hero was a man whose character was a mixture between bad and good, but with good predominance. This definition is usually summarized as a "basic noble man with a tragic flaw" and Oedipus certainly fitted that module. Oedipus was a concerned, caring king whose people admired, loved and trusted him, but he has an agile, aggressive temper and fails to think in some critical situations (example - of the link between the failure to think and the terrible crimes). As a result, he commit some terrible crimes, destroyed his personal world, and dragged some innocent people along with his own misery.
Aristotle has stated the outline that the characteristics of a tragic hero which is a "man who is superior to the average in some sort of way". In Oedipus, he is superior not because of the social oligarchy that he places him in, but also he is clever and basically the only person that could solve the Sphinx's riddle but at the same time, a tragic hero must extract the attributes of both fear and pity. A character with both negative and positive characteristics is more compelling than a character that only has good and positive characteristics and Oedipus definitely has some imperfections (example). While he was a smart person, he was completely oblivious to the truth that he married his mother (Jocasta), killed his father (King Laius), and refuses to believe what Tiresias says to him (I say to you and your most dearly loved as wrapped together in together in a hideous sin, blind to the horror of it 428), and although a good nurturing father, he unknowingly birth children in incest. A tragic hero agonizes because of his own weakness which was his arrogance and superiority complex towards others.
as a conclusion i would reflect back to Aristoteles thesis.
Hey shaddyraddy,
If you want to expand your essay, it might work to introduce Oedipus in a more general way (he comes from greek mythologie etc.) so that the reader who is unfamiliar with the subject understands your thesis. Furthermore, you could give a few examples when a statement is made to avoid assumptions. + you don't always say that you are giving an example.
According to Aristotle, the ideal tragic hero was a man whose character was a mixture between bad and good, but with good predominance. This definition is usually summarized as a "basic noble man with a tragic flaw" and Oedipus certainly fitted that module. Oedipus was a concerned, caring king whose people admired, loved and trusted him, but he has an agile, aggressive temper and fails to think in some critical situations (example - of the link between the failure to think and the terrible crimes). As a result, he commit some terrible crimes, destroyed his personal world, and dragged some innocent people along with his own misery.
Aristotle has stated the outline that the characteristics of a tragic hero which is a "man who is superior to the average in some sort of way". In Oedipus, he is superior not because of the social oligarchy that he places him in, but also he is clever and basically the only person that could solve the Sphinx's riddle but at the same time, a tragic hero must extract the attributes of both fear and pity. A character with both negative and positive characteristics is more compelling than a character that only has good and positive characteristics and Oedipus definitely has some imperfections (example). While he was a smart person, he was completely oblivious to the truth that he married his mother (Jocasta), killed his father (King Laius), and refuses to believe what Tiresias says to him (I say to you and your most dearly loved as wrapped together in together in a hideous sin, blind to the horror of it 428), and although a good nurturing father, he unknowingly birth children in incest. A tragic hero agonizes because of his own weakness which was his arrogance and superiority complex towards others.
as a conclusion i would reflect back to Aristoteles thesis.