Writing Feedback / GRE: Mason City residents & Water sports - Argumentive Essay [3]

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In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted

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Water sports might be the favourite recreational activity of mason city citizens according to the surveys but, ironically, mason river flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits (as the author quotes). hence, the devotion of a little of the city park department's fund can be justified.

Residents of Mason city constantly complain for the quality of river water and the river's smell but that does not ensue the increased use of the river for water sports at all. This is because, author does not have evidences to prove that the residents complain for the cleanliness of the river in order to use the river for recreational activities. It might be possible that the residents have health concerns and they are worried about the in-hygienic conditions of the river that may cause diseases in the city.

Also, author herself states that in spite of some of the facilities provided by the city park department, the river is rarely used by the residents. In fact, author should look for the sufficient reasons for the river is not being used by the residents in spite of the facilities provided by the government. Therefore, the conclusion made by author that after the cleaning of the river, the use of river for water sports would increase is conspicuously presumptuous.

Another claim that author makes is that the city government should devote more money in the coming year to the riverside recreational activities. This claim is based on the conclusion that is already presumptuous. However, government should first analyze the requirements of the city and then prioritize them according to their importance and only then should decide the amount of budget that needs to be spend on recreational facilities. If after cleaning of the river, some increase in the usage of river for water sports is seen, only then, should the government consider increasing the amount of money to be spend on riverside recreational facilities(if demanded by the residents). There might be several other preemptive requirements of the city that needs to be attended first.

Therefore, author's claims that the cleaning of the river would surely increase the usage of river for water sports and that the government should devote more money on riverside recreational activities are completely precarious.

Writing Feedback / GRE Issue Task; More technology for problem solving results in less ability to think? [3]

ISSUE TOPIC : As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

UNDOUBTEDLY, DAY BY DAY, THE TECHNOLOGY IS DEVELOPING MORE AND MORE AND MAKING OUR EFFORTS LESSER AND LESSER. BUT THIS DOES NOT CONCLUDE THAT HUMANS' ABILITY WILL DETERIORATE WITH THE USE OF TECHNOLOGY IN OUR DAILY LIFE. IN FACT, THE NEW TECHNOLOGIES INTRIGUE THE HUMAN MINDS AND MAKE THEM THINK ABOUT THE ITS WORKING, DEVELOPMENT AND POSSIBLE ADVANCEMENTS. THE HUMAN MINDS GET ENGAGED IN THINKING THAT HOW THIS TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN DEVELOPED, HOW IS IT WORKING AND HOW THE THINGS AROUND US HAVE BEEN PUT TOGETHER TO MAKE IT WORK. THE TECHNOLOGY DOES NOT STOP AT ANY POINT BUT GOES ON DEVELOPING AND ADVANCING WITH EACH PASSING DAY. AND ALL THIS IS POSSIBLE BECAUSE OF THE CAPABILITY OF HUMAN MINDS TO THINK BEYOND THE EXISTING. THE EXISTING TECHNOLOGIES GIVE RISE TO THE CURIOSITY IN HUMANS TO BUILD BETTER AND THIS CURIOSITY MAKES THEM TO THINK IN A MORE INNOVATIVE WAY THAT GIVES BIRTH TO NEW IDEAS.

FOR EXAMPLE, TAKE COMPUTERS. THE COMPUTERS WERE DEVELOPED TO SIMPLIFY THE CALCULATIONS AND COMPUTATIONS. BUT, HUMAN MINDS THOUGHT BEYOND IT AND STARTED DEVELOPING THE COMPUTERS SO THAT THEY MAY BE USED FOR OTHER PURPOSES ALSO. THIS LEADS TO THE USE OF COMPUTERS AS TYPEWRITERS. DEVELOPMENT LEAPED AND SO THE ADVANCEMENTS OF COMPUTERS. TODAY, COMPUTERS ARE BEEN USED IN EVERY FIELD YOU NAME. IN FACT, COMPUTERS COULD BE CALLED PANACEA IN TODAY'S WORLD. EVEN TODAY, THE HUMAN MINDS ARE THINKING AND MAKING THE ADVANCEMENTS TO THE EXISTING TECHNOLOGY OF COMPUTERS.

LIKEWISE, THE DEVELOPMENT OF AUTOMOBILES, AIRCRAFTS, MOBILE PHONES, WIRELESS COMMUNICATION, SENSORS AND SO ON CAN BE CONSIDERED. TAKE ANY OF THE ABOVE TECHNOLOGIES AND IT IS FOUND THAT TECHNOLOGY DOES NOT HINDER THE ABILITY OF HUMANS TO THINK RATHER HELP THE HUMAN KIND TO THINK BEYOND THE LIMITS.

IT IS DUE TO THESE TECHNOLOGIES ONLY, THAT TODAY HUMANS ARE ABLE TO REACH THE PLACES AND DO THE THINGS THAT WERE CONSIDERED IMPOSSIBLE EARLIER. THE TECHNOLOGY PROVIDES THE HUMAN MINDS A NEW LIMIT TO THINK. IT SHOULD NOT BE FORGOTTEN THAT IT WAS HUMAN MIND THAT CREATE THE TECHNOLOGY AND NOT THE TECHNOLOGY THAT CREATED THE HUMAN MIND. THEREFORE, IT IS IMPOSSIBLE FOR TECHNOLOGY TO DETERIORATE ITS GOD FATHER I.E. HUMAN MIND.