Writing Feedback / Advantages of living in the dormitory rooms and apartment buildings - COMPARISON [3]

Habib Rastegar[b]
Hi habib,
I think that you have a lot of ideas but its not orderly constructed.
You should site first the advantages and disadvantages of dormitory then the apartment to be organize. I didn't read any disadvantage about the two places you mentioned.

(I think not all students need to live in a apartment or a dormitory, you need to specify why students need to live in such places like living in a distant place from school or university)

Students of college and university usually have two places where they can to live in.

Some students prefer to live in dormitory buildings where are located on the campus. Others, however,may like to live in apartments in the community.

Furthermore , apartments are spacious and larger than dorm rooms.
I believe when you are comparing you need to use on the other hand...

Last but not least , livings in dorms are conveniently, too.
you could use lastly to make it more prof

To sum up from what I have discussed above, we can draw a safely conclusion that, [b]both dorm and apartment buildings ate the are best places for the students (state why like safety).