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Jun 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / Older generations consumed healthy food compared to what is consumed by people today. [2]

[Topic: In the past people ate foods that were better for their health than people today.]

For recent century, diet of people has changed a lot from natural ingredients to partly artificial ingredients. Some people think that the food in the past is healthier while others may insist that artificial food may be better for people's health. For my opinion, I totally agree with the statement that food in the past was much healthier than it is in our present life due to the following reasons.

To start with, the ingredients of ancient people's food are mostly from their farmland that the whole process can be considered safe. For the process of ancient people's food, the quality from seeds or eggs to vegetables or meat can be wholly guaranteed since they are all processed by themselves. On the contrast, we will never know that whether the food we bought at supermarket has been contaminated or not. It is because that the processes of today's food are done by some big company. Some food can be harmful to our body due to some careless defect from manufacturing process. Therefore, people's food in the past is much healthier than it is in today's world.

Moreover, there are not too many technologies to produce harmful ingredients for artificial food in the past. To lower the capital cost, most of food manufacturing company tend to use technology to synthesis some ingredient to make food's flavor become stronger. However, most of these artificial ingredients are harmful to people's body since these materials are not come from natural process. Taking some beverages as example, the flavor of orange in orange soda may not come from orange juice but from some orange flavor powder.

Last but not the least, people do not tend to put too many salt or sugar in food in the past. Admittedly, sugar and salt are harmful to our health if we eat too much. In the past, salt and sugar are very expensive that they are not affordable for most of people during that time. Consequently, they will not add too much salt or sugar in their food. Thus, the food prepared by ancient people can be healthier than those prepared by today's people.

To sum, according to the points mentioned above, it is believed that foods of ancient people was much healthier than today's food.
j0937065063   
Jun 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: PEOPLE WHO CANT ACCEPT CRITISISM ARE NOT GOOD TEAM PLAYERS [2]

Topic:[People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful at working in a group.]

Recently, one topic always under debate is those successful workers need to accept criticism from others. Some people may think it is necessary to listen to others' opinion while others may deny this statement. Basically, I personally agree with this statement that criticisms from others are always the positive force for our personal improvement due to the following reasons.

To start with, others' suggestions can be objective for us. As known, people always tend to think in their own logic. Taking my own as example, when I was a graduate student, I always inclined to think that I am being nice to my lab-mate. However, one of my senior told me that some of my behavior, such as eating in the office, may makes others feel annoying. Suddenly, I discovered that much unintentional movement can usually be trouble for others but nothing for our self. Therefore, other people's opinions can always be objective that we can adjust our self by accepting it.

Moreover, accepting criticisms from others can make us have good relationship with co-workers. Admittedly, good relationship is always the most important thing for a group of people, especially in workplaces. As the proverb says, "Two heads are better than one." Things can always become better by having discussion or criticisms. For example, if a smart engineer tend to finish a project by his own effort without taking others' criticisms, he will be blamed in the future and finally have no friend to help him on his work. On the contrast, his work and relationship are able to become better simultaneously by accepting criticisms from others. Without good relationship by accepting others' opinion, people can always be failed on their work.

Last but not the least, we can always re-exam our attitude on working by others' criticisms. Mostly, people will tend to feel tired and finally become lazy on their work after working for a long time. However, people usually do not discover that they are not as hard as they are when they firstly enter into the company. By taking others' criticism on us, we can always re-exam our attitude on working. Finally, we may be promoted since others have noticed us to be diligent all the time. Thus, only people who can accept others' criticism can always become successful on work.

To sum, according to the points mentioned above, it is believed that people cannot have a successful career without accepting others' opinion. Once if people accept others' criticism and finally make some improvement on themselves, it will be great for both themselves and the company.
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