Writing Feedback / students of school age should be allowed to use cellphone [2]

Topic: Should students of school age be allowed to use cellphone?
Intro:
Nowadays, the emergence of telephone have significantly changed people's life, it makes life much easier. Telephone is now being changed overtime and has developed in a new type of phone which is cellphone. Cellphone nowadays is very popular due to it convinient and usefulness. I think cellphone should be allowed to students of school age for some reasons as follows.

Body:
First, cellphone is a very useful mean of communication. It is needed in situations you need to contact someone immediately. For example, when you forget your notebook at home and you can't go get it at the moment, you just need to call someone at home and ask them to bring it to you. It is very convinient in many ways. Furthermore, it is also an efficient study tool. Cellphone is also very useful for this. You can use your cellphone as a dictionary when you see a new word. Or when you see a long math problem, you can also use your cellphone as a calculator. Cellphone can help you a lot in studying. Finally, cellphone is a very entertaining tool. There are a lot of things you can do using cellphones. You can download applications into your cellphone, listening to music or even access to the internet. There are many ways to entertain using your cellphone.

Conclusion:
In conclusion, i think students of school age should be allowed to use cellphone. Cellphone is a very useful tool for students, it would be a waste if they are not allowed to use them.

Writing Feedback / What are the negative effects of overpopulation? [5]

Topic: What are the negative effects of overpopulation?
Introduction:
Today, a lot of problems are being noticed all over the world such as global warming or earthquakes. But one serious problem that a lot of people aren't aware of is overpopulation. Overpopulation can cause some negative effects such as overloaded infranstructures, traffic jam and lack of accomodations.

Body:
First, overpopulation might result in overloaded infranstructures. If the population gets bigger, there won't be enough facillity to meet the demand of the current population such as hospitals or schools, so many people may not have a wide selection of school school or medical care. Furthermore, overpolulation may also cause traffic jam. Due to the demand of many people needed to own private vehicles which will cause traffic jam . The ammount of time needed to get to places will then be increase. Many people will need to wake up early to get to work in time and they might fall asleep when working. Finally, overpopulation can lead to lack of accomodation. When the population gets too high, the country may not have enough space for everyone in that country. A lot of people might become homeless because of overpopulation.

Conclusion:
In conclusion, some negative effects such as overloaded infrantstructures, traffic jam and lack of accomodation can be caused due to overpopulation.