Apik
Dec 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - 'you don't spend a lot of money' - the best way to travel is in group led by tour guide [3]
It seems to me that reasons for your choice should be stated in the body of your essay but not in the introduction. Otherwise it will loss its precise structure. But if you want, you can write something like this "Here are some reasons to prove my viewpoint".
You can write "one" or it or some synonym to avoid repetition of the word "lifestyle"
a tour guide who directs the group
However, as far as I' m concerned, the best way to travel is with the group and also a tour guide who direct the group, because you spend less money during the travel, you can overcome difficulties of travel easily and you live more efficient time in the travel .
It seems to me that reasons for your choice should be stated in the body of your essay but not in the introduction. Otherwise it will loss its precise structure. But if you want, you can write something like this "Here are some reasons to prove my viewpoint".
Maybe, lifestyle of country that you visit is very different from your lifestyle .If you don't know this lifestyle , you have difficulties to overcome.At this point, tour guide is the most beneficial person for you to learn this lifestyle .
You can write "one" or it or some synonym to avoid repetition of the word "lifestyle"