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Jul 22, 2013
Undergraduate / "The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air" ; Entrepreneurial Community Essay [2]
I just wrote an essay for admission into an entrepreneurial community at my college, and I was wondering if you all would read it and give me some advice and criticism!
Prompt : What talents would you bring to the community?
As a child, I started a lemonade stand on the sidewalk of my residential neighborhood. I didn't have any customers, and it was evident that I didn't have the fierce tenacity to succeed with my first business. To cope with my disappointment, I watched my favorite sitcom "The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air", starring popular actor and producer Will Smith. At the time, I was unaware of the determination, persistence, and passion that Will Smith possessed. However, a few years ago, I stumbled upon a quote by Smith, "It's unrealistic to think you're going to bend a piece of metal and fly people over an ocean, but fortunately the Wright Brother's didn't believe that." Essentially, this quote awakened my entrepreneurial spirit. I am captivated by the possibility of breaking the status quo and creating my own venture. I believe this kind of relentless passion is needed in such a community. As the captain of my high school tennis team, I have developed the qualities of a leader and a strong work ethic; I want to challenge my peers to succeed. Regarding skillsets, I am an action-orientated person who is interested in mobile application development and websites. To this very day, "The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air" is still one of my favorite sitcoms, but I am ready to take on more challenging ventures than a simple lemonade stand.
Thanks a lot!
I just wrote an essay for admission into an entrepreneurial community at my college, and I was wondering if you all would read it and give me some advice and criticism!
Prompt : What talents would you bring to the community?
As a child, I started a lemonade stand on the sidewalk of my residential neighborhood. I didn't have any customers, and it was evident that I didn't have the fierce tenacity to succeed with my first business. To cope with my disappointment, I watched my favorite sitcom "The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air", starring popular actor and producer Will Smith. At the time, I was unaware of the determination, persistence, and passion that Will Smith possessed. However, a few years ago, I stumbled upon a quote by Smith, "It's unrealistic to think you're going to bend a piece of metal and fly people over an ocean, but fortunately the Wright Brother's didn't believe that." Essentially, this quote awakened my entrepreneurial spirit. I am captivated by the possibility of breaking the status quo and creating my own venture. I believe this kind of relentless passion is needed in such a community. As the captain of my high school tennis team, I have developed the qualities of a leader and a strong work ethic; I want to challenge my peers to succeed. Regarding skillsets, I am an action-orientated person who is interested in mobile application development and websites. To this very day, "The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air" is still one of my favorite sitcoms, but I am ready to take on more challenging ventures than a simple lemonade stand.
Thanks a lot!
