Writing Feedback / [ielts task2]Nowadays some people prefer to rebuild or redesign the old houses..... [2]

Once again please help me out there, many thanks:

2.Nowadays some people prefer to rebuild or redesign the old houses, they want to modernize them.
Tell the advantages or disadvantages by your opinion.

The issue of whether the old buildings should be reconstructed or redesigned to
cater for a better cityscape or living conditions has sparked off an intense debate.
To my way of thinking, I believe that due to its inherent cultural and historical values,
the old houses and dwellings should not be replaced without serious considerations.

Admittedly, for those poorly designed and over-used buildings,
It is a good choice to bulldoze over them and give way to the urban growth.
With the rapid development of urban economy and ever-growing number of urban populations,
Nowadays, there are increasing demand on land space and housing resource,
In this case, the modern architectures such as high-rise buildings which deemed as
preferred design for the dwellings of high density would naturally take priority over those traditional buildings.
In addition, another reason for redesign the old buildings is they are too old to live.
In other words, the old fashioned construction often lack of supporting facilities,
such as water supplies, ventilations and sewage treatments and so forth,
which are esential elements to enable citizens to live a comfortable and relaxing life.

However, it is widely accepted that blindly toppling down all the time-honoured buildings would become a real disaster to the public.
First of all, certain historical buildings are the witnesses of a number of historic events,
which commonly possess the unique historical and cultural heritages of a nation.
Therefore it is more sensible to preserve them rather than demolish them.
Moreover, some old architectures have been blessed with unique construction techniques and wisdoms of our predecessors.
and these could be, directly or indirectly, utilised as living references to arouse today's architects inspiration and stir up their imaginations
to further develop contemporary architectures.

In conclusion, I concede that even though the clean up of the old buildings contribute to the modernisation of cities,
Nevertheless, I am convinced that the existing of certain memorable buildings would be a preferred balance between the urban ideals and realities.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Nowadays many people do longer work hours and have more stress.. [3]

Dear all, I am a new guy here, I would like to take my IELTS G class exam in near future.
following essay is one of my practice, I would be appreciate if you guys could give some sugguestions and corrections:)

1.Nowadays many people do longer work hours and have more stress, what do you think and how employers to do?

Recent decades have witnessed an obvious trend that an ever-growing amount of working time and
work-induced stress have become common places among the employees in the contemporary society.
In this essay, I aim at discussing what are the real causes beneath the surface and how should
the employers to do to tackle these regretful social issues.

First of all, I personally believe that the chief culprit among the causes of having extended
working hours and enlarged job stress is the fierce social competition and its consequences.
Nowadays, it is undeniable that compared with several decades before or even ten years ago,
people are confronting with more peer pressures than ever, this is especially true when it comes
to young employees who are fighting for their first fortune in their early careers.
In addition, the substantial family burdens and financial pressures are also considered as the incentive factor of this situation.
It is a common sense that there is a proportionality between how much you are paid and how much you take effort into it.
As a result, there are more and more people choice to work harder and even put pressure on themselves
for the sake of better payments and benefits.

Consequently, as the administrator and representative of the corporations, the business-owners
have no choice but to take feasible action to mitigate these adverse tendencies.
To begin with, creating an sound and effective job welfares for the work forces is a good
case in point. This is simply because a well-rounded benefit system could make workers enjoy their careers
via an array of substantial benefits rather than tolerate it.
Moreover, establishing a proper mood of harmony and unity among the workers is also conducive to alleviate their stress.
The reason for this is that the care and support from their boss and colleagues enable them
to dispel such negative feelings and build up positive attitude toward their lives.

In reality, of course, there is still no common consensus on how to alleviate the employee's burdens and stress.
However, if the above suggested measures could be put into effect,
I am convinced that these unpleasant side-effect toward workers would be declined to some extent.