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These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on TV, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour.
Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the number of violent programs on television is increasing rapidly. There are those who say that could affect negatively how children behave. In my opinion, children should be restricted from watching violence on television due to its pessimistic impacts.

First of all, television with violent shows or channels could easily affects children's characteristics, since they are still at ages of discovering themselves and shaping their own personalities. For example, a small boy often watches movies which include lots of fight-scenes. As a consequence, those action somehow lead him to similar thoughts and behaviour. He then may become aggressive and stubborn, eventhough he used tobe a good-natured boy.

Secondly, it is a truth that children tend to imitate a lot of things they see. And this does not except for violence on television which they watch everyday. As children are not mature and knowledgeable enough to control their mind and manage their orientation, they might feel interested in anything and want to try it once. In many situations, that caused serious problems. For instance, there was a group of teenagers who were arrested as robbers and murders. The point here is that thay said they did this after watching an action film, and they even did not know killing someone is committing crime. It sounds unbelieveable but it happened.

To conclude, for the purpose of satisfying people who are fond of adventure, horror, or detective, more and more violent contents are being performed on television today. But in cases of audiences who are children, those programs really have a lot of disadvantages which affect their behaviour. If adults continue allowing children to watch more violent television programs, we must be seriously worried about whether they would develop themselves the right way.