e_nicole08
Aug 15, 2013
Undergraduate / Honors, fame, and glory. Who doesn't want it? - applying to Honor's College [2]
The overall topic of the essay was great! Hope these few comments help!
The fluidity of these sentences are questionable and imply both singular and plural subjects.
This sentence seems to be a bit wordy. I like what you were getting at, but try to do so in fewer words.
Lastly, "I" seemed to be repetitive especially in the second paragraph.
Good luck in getting into Honors College!
The overall topic of the essay was great! Hope these few comments help!
Also, an honor student need, to a certain extent, to develop and demonstrate certain leadership abilities.
I want to push myself to see if I can accomplished my goals and task,
The fluidity of these sentences are questionable and imply both singular and plural subjects.
With the Honor's degree as a symbol of wisdom and character by my side, I am certain that I will be able to have confidence as well as the ethics to not only carries on, but also to be successful in the face of whatever comes my way in the venture of my major.
This sentence seems to be a bit wordy. I like what you were getting at, but try to do so in fewer words.
Lastly, "I" seemed to be repetitive especially in the second paragraph.
Good luck in getting into Honors College!