clau089
Aug 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / Trusting everyone; CBEST/ memorable childhood experience [3]
I need help with my writing, please be hard on me.
Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience and explain its effect on your life.
As a child, I was very immature and innocent. I believed in the good nature of individuals. My father used to tell me, time and time again, that trusting everyone could get me in trouble. However, I pay little attention to my old man's words until an accident change my viewpoint.
When I turned seven my parents gave me a bicycle as a present. It was beautiful. Dad also gave me a lock and warned me it was my responsibility to care for my gift. I did not understand why the lock was necessary. "The bicycle is just an object. Who would dare to anything to it?" I thought. It took a while to save enough money for the bicycle, a detail my dad forgot to mention at the moment.
One day my mother sent me to the store, which was six blocks away, to buy a few things for dinner. Once I got to the store, I left my bicycle outside. Some teenager were playing cards and I asked them "if it would be too much trouble to keep an eye on my bike". They assure me that I had nothing to worry because it was in good hands. I trust them. After I was done with the errands, I went to get my bicycle only to find out that it was not there. It took me a while to realize that those kids had stole it. I was in shock, paralyzed in astonishment, that someone could do something so malicious.
Disappointment was the only emotion on my dad's eyes. I understood the honesty is a trait that not everyone possesses. Trusting everyone can certainly get you in trouble, just like my dad told me. To this day I still recall his words and try to be more cautious about the people I relied
I need help with my writing, please be hard on me.
Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience and explain its effect on your life.
As a child, I was very immature and innocent. I believed in the good nature of individuals. My father used to tell me, time and time again, that trusting everyone could get me in trouble. However, I pay little attention to my old man's words until an accident change my viewpoint.
When I turned seven my parents gave me a bicycle as a present. It was beautiful. Dad also gave me a lock and warned me it was my responsibility to care for my gift. I did not understand why the lock was necessary. "The bicycle is just an object. Who would dare to anything to it?" I thought. It took a while to save enough money for the bicycle, a detail my dad forgot to mention at the moment.
One day my mother sent me to the store, which was six blocks away, to buy a few things for dinner. Once I got to the store, I left my bicycle outside. Some teenager were playing cards and I asked them "if it would be too much trouble to keep an eye on my bike". They assure me that I had nothing to worry because it was in good hands. I trust them. After I was done with the errands, I went to get my bicycle only to find out that it was not there. It took me a while to realize that those kids had stole it. I was in shock, paralyzed in astonishment, that someone could do something so malicious.
Disappointment was the only emotion on my dad's eyes. I understood the honesty is a trait that not everyone possesses. Trusting everyone can certainly get you in trouble, just like my dad told me. To this day I still recall his words and try to be more cautious about the people I relied
