rosenwald_phd
Sep 25, 2013
Undergraduate / POWER; UVA College/What is your favorite word and why? [3]
Really consider what you are trying to portray to the college. To summarize your essay in a sentence: You desire power over all other virtues and ideals. Not what a college wants to see at all. Power is a tricky subject...having power just because you want power is honestly not good...
As for the writing itself...meh. Show, don't tell. Narrate a story/event instead of rambling on about large philosophical ideas that are only tangentially related. Concise, to the point, perhaps a tad more grounded philosophically? Have some fun with it as well -- it's a fun, quirky prompt -- they are looking for a fun and quirky response (although deep is great if done right). Power is a general word. Try to find a word that really stands out and sets you apart and speaks to who you are!
Good luck!
Really consider what you are trying to portray to the college. To summarize your essay in a sentence: You desire power over all other virtues and ideals. Not what a college wants to see at all. Power is a tricky subject...having power just because you want power is honestly not good...
As for the writing itself...meh. Show, don't tell. Narrate a story/event instead of rambling on about large philosophical ideas that are only tangentially related. Concise, to the point, perhaps a tad more grounded philosophically? Have some fun with it as well -- it's a fun, quirky prompt -- they are looking for a fun and quirky response (although deep is great if done right). Power is a general word. Try to find a word that really stands out and sets you apart and speaks to who you are!
Good luck!
