Undergraduate / "Time's up, the proctor called" ; Princeton/ Person with significant influence [4]

i actually love this essay... haha lol idk about what the person above says but i think your points are made very well... and the transition to jake is clear to me and makes sense

Because though she is a smart, logical mathematician
slight error, but i think it'll rest great with the princeton niguandos, especially because it's about caring and community :)
and i dont think you need the extra "beyond the scope of that test"
i feel like if you have decent stats (2300+) you'll get into a least one of harvard princeton yale stanford
out of curiosity, do you fit that bill?

Undergraduate / Define: Success. Common App Essay 3, recount failure. Debate. [2]

i can definitely relate to the essay, but as it is it may bore an admisssions officer who is just skimming through most essays. add something to spice it up, like an anecdote, and let that show some of the points you directly state in your essay.

will you read and provide input about my essay? i would appreciate it SO much.

Undergraduate / 'My siter's success' - Commonapp essay: Having a twin. [7]

i like your essay, but i think you should include a specific event(s). it will draw the attention of the adcom and overall make your message more impactful. would you mind taking a look at my essay? i would appreciate it A LOT

Undergraduate / Pura Vida - UF Undergraduate Admissions Essay [2]

you should be more specific as to how you were uniquely affected by the experience, because at the moment it sounds a bit cliche. you can focus on the unique message of pura vida and bring it out more. another thing is that i would work on your opening paragraph - i think the first sentence could flow better. thanks for critiquing my essay.