swagmaster420x
Oct 13, 2013
Undergraduate / Pura Vida - UF Undergraduate Admissions Essay [2]
you should be more specific as to how you were uniquely affected by the experience, because at the moment it sounds a bit cliche. you can focus on the unique message of pura vida and bring it out more. another thing is that i would work on your opening paragraph - i think the first sentence could flow better. thanks for critiquing my essay.
you should be more specific as to how you were uniquely affected by the experience, because at the moment it sounds a bit cliche. you can focus on the unique message of pura vida and bring it out more. another thing is that i would work on your opening paragraph - i think the first sentence could flow better. thanks for critiquing my essay.