Writing Feedback / IELTS- Problems with students behaviour [3]

There are more problems with students' behaviour in many countries. What are the causes and what are your solutions?

Students behavorial issues have increasingly drew public attention and worried both their families and schools. In my opinion, there are many factors contributing to this phynomenon, such as parenting style and influence of public media.

The upbringing might be responsible for indiscipline action. Due to the fast pace of life, tired up with living, parents cannot spend adequate time with their children, thereby spoilling them to make up with love and care. Consequently, children who have whatever they want may grow up without consideration of others and without conception of livings. Then when they are in school, they are highly likely to be of low self-control or poor discipline. For example, they may have less respect for their teachers and refuse to obey school rules.

On the other hand, public media has a profound impact on student behaviour. In fact, students are vulnerable to be exposed to excessive mount of violent content. Without proper supervision from their parents, they might influenced which lead to increasing possibility of aggressive behaviours or other related issues, such as bulling younger students, skipping school

Perhaps parenting classes are required in terms of acquiring correct parenting techniques and skills. At the mean time, proper government censor mechanism are supposed to be introduced to reduce the frequency and volume of violent and sexual content on public media.

To sum up, in order to combat this particular issue, concerted efforts should be made from not only an individual family, but also the society as a whole.

Writing Feedback / [IETLS] TV advertising is bad - Agree or Disagree? [7]

Advertisements plays a major role on TV in market economies. Despite the benefits of such information, many people criticize the role of TV advertising. To what extend do you agree or disagree with their view?

In contemporary economy system, television advertising plays an essential role in providing information and promoting products. Even though it does carry some adverse effects, simply criticizing TV advertisement cannot be justified.

It is manifest TV advertising has some negative impacts on both businesses and individuals. Firstly, the most obvious disadvantage is the high cost involvement. Since advertisements are required to be repeated several times to attract the attention of the target market, it inevitably includes a high cost to air on television channels, which is not affordable for some small businesses. Secondly, the majority of advertisements on TV only last a few seconds thereby not being effective on conveying information about products. Therefore , it would not appeal to consumer and induce them to buy goods.

On the other hand, the enjoyment of watching TV could be seriously interrupted and spoiled due to the increasing number of advertisements. As a consequence, people have to cope with the constant distraction from programs.

Clearly, however, TV advertisements present a number of advantages. In the first place, they communicate products to a large number of people, who could be turned into potential consumers, in a short span of time. in terms of products sales, it may leads to an increase of purchasing products. Correspondingly, television advertisements help to keep the price of consumer goods down. In the second place, advertising industry is an essential source of employment.

In summary, it is highly unlikely to avoid advertisements being an effective marking strategy on television. But at least limiting the length of advertisement and improving the consistency of TV programs can be done.