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Posts by michael_brand1
Name: Michael Castro
Joined: Nov 23, 2013
Last Post: Dec 11, 2013
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From: United States of America
School: Plainview High School

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michael_brand1   
Dec 11, 2013
Undergraduate / Texas Tech Essay-Electricity & Music/ Education and career goals [2]

the prompt:

Education and career goals
please state education and career goals and the reason for choosing your major

My Major choice is based on a combination of family needs and a deep liking and history with electrical products. Since I have been able to understand the capabilities of electrical devices, I have always wondered how they work together and if they could optimized to do more. Becoming an electrical engineer will stimulate my want to understand the products around me, which is why I plan to at least achieve a bachelors degree in electrical engineering. Another skill I plan to take into college is my musicianship, seeing as I have both the enjoyment and skills to play in a college band I would like to also participate in the school of music.

Though I do not currently want to pursue a career of music I would still like to further my skills by participating in a college music program. Currently, I am a trombone player who, out of all the Plainview High School band members, has advanced the farthest in region, area and state competitions. I very much enjoy the capability to play music, to understand music more than others, and make music of my own, but I cannot see my musicianship sprout into a career, only as a lifetime hobby. The reasons I do not want to persevere a music career is the instability as a career and my preference of electricity and electronics to playing my instrument. Even though I prefer electronics I am interested in achieving a degree in music education, but because I am set on achieving a electronic engineering degree, first and foremost, the possibility in achieving a second degree in music education is very slim because of financial and time management a degree in music seems very implausible at this point of my life.

My main interest in college will be electrical engineering, as I try to achieve a bachelors then possibly a masters. The reasons I have decided that a career in electrical engineering is my constant research in optimizing a device for uses farther that it was made to do, whether it be on the internet, opening the device itself or simply trying its compatibility with other devices. Countless times I have found myself opening the seams to a controller trying to find its malfunction, rewiring the home surround sound or the car speakers to see if there is a better way for the best sound, and splicing wires to connect two devices together because of my belief that it can always be better. Having the want to make the best device possible, I see electrical engineering as a way to let this passion into a career. Though electrical engineering will benefit me in many selfish ways, the degree seems to grant a need for my family, stability. Electricity and electrical devices on the rise every day encourages me that electrical engineering will help me and my family raise our ability to become a family that does not say "if" but "when."

Though there are many obstacles and time between now and when I leave college, I believe that I have enough determination and need to achieve my ultimate goal of graduating college with a degree ready to face adulthood successfully but alone. I have done much consideration in my goal and my choice of electricity over music and plan to do the best with my life for my life but most importantly for my family around me and my family yet to come.
michael_brand1   
Dec 11, 2013
Scholarship / Academic/career short-term, long-term goals,and Hispanic heritage influence on these goals [2]

Instead of using 5, 6, try using "five...six"

There have been more than enough challenges for my family, being Hispanic and undocumented for a few years is really difficult

I think you should take out "is really difficult" or have a period after family
When you state you want to be a physician, it seems a bit abrupt to me. It was just stated and thrown in there.
It kind of seems as though you're stating your last and final goal in life is to become a missionary physician, I hope there's more!

Last bit of advice, try inserting a conclusion, wrapping up everything
michael_brand1   
Dec 11, 2013
Undergraduate / What is your favorite word and why? - Honesty [6]

When I became more matured

I'd think "As I matured" would work better? Sounds a bit odd to me

actually it is viable

Also, I believe "it is actually" would fit better
michael_brand1   
Nov 23, 2013
Scholarship / 'finding a cure for cancer' First essay for scholarships/admission for UT, activities [2]

PROMPT: Considering your lifetime goals, discuss how your current and future academic and extra-curricular activities might help you achieve your goals.
With everything I'm involved in I strive to better myself so that I may be able to achieve and accomplish current and future goals. I challenge myself everyday to work with excellence so that I have the opportunity to make dreams and goals become more than that, a reality.

Academically, I have chosen to take the most rigorous classes my high school offers so that I may be able to learn as much as I can and to be adequately prepared for life as well as college. Because these classes entail an accelerated curriculum, I have improved myself both in and out of the classroom. I have been able to gain much more self responsibility and perseverance through these classes. Since many of my goals reside in the health care field, I believe I am preparing myself well in order to pursue those goals. To start out, I have successfully completed courses such as Principles of Health Science, Medical Terminology, and Anatomy and Physiology.

Now, regarding extracurricular activities I am currently participating in our high school band program. Marching band has pushed myself with self-discipline and made me a better person, more responsible, a better communicator, a better team player, and a better leader over the past four years. For three years, I have competed and served in HOSA, Health Occupation Students of America, competing in extemporaneous health poster making, HOSA Bowl, and this year, in pharmacology at area levels. Also, this year, I am the HOSA president for the Plainview chapter, which has assisted me in improving my leadership and responsibility. Last year, I participated and successfully completed a Certified Nurse Aide course. Taking this course was a great challenge but overcoming personal obstacles benefited me greatly because I am now working as a CNA in an ICU at Covenant Hospital. Working as a nurse aide has taught me many valuable things I will be able to take with me throughout life and my career as a nurse. I am able to have spectacular insight on the medical field because I work with excellent nurses and doctors. When I am with them, I learn information about medicine, patient care, professionalism, and different career opportunities that exist in medicine. I am also involved in a pharmacology class in which I will become a Certified Pharmacy Tech preceding graduation from high school. I enrolled and am taking this class because I strongly felt that it would benefit me greatly when I am in nursing school and when I actually am a nurse. This course has helped me in improving my study habits for competitions, clinicals, and my certification test.

Going to and completing nursing school after high school will be an early step in chasing after becoming a nurse, and later on becoming a nurse anesthetist or nurse practitioner. Also, completing nursing school will prepare me in traveling as a nurse. Furthermore, I would be able to enter research on the mission to finding a cure for cancer.

Being able to derive life skills such as responsibility, self discipline, leadership, and communication from various activities I am involved with will be greatly rewarding as I go throughout life, accomplishing my goals. Without these skills, I don't think I would be able to even come close to reaching lifetime goals.

Thank you in advance!! I was wondering if my essay was effective, stays on the topic, and answers the question well.
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