Unanswered [5] | Urgent [0]
  

Posts by vsa10002
Name: Victoria A
Joined: Dec 2, 2013
Last Post: Jan 11, 2014
Threads: 2
Posts: 4  
From: United States of America

Displayed posts: 6
sort: Latest first   Oldest first  | 
vsa10002   
Jan 11, 2014
Graduate / My patience, enthusiasm and flexibility ; SOP Speech Pathology [4]

My only suggestion would be to rework this paragraph:

I hope to begin graduate school this fall at GRAD SCHOOL and move one step closer to achieving my dream of becoming a speech language pathologist. My goals and interests are a perfect match with GRAD SCHOOL program. I am excited to gain experience in both medical and school settings with clients of all ages. GRAD SCHOOL's emphasis on working with cultural and linguistically diverse individuals would provide the multicultural experience I crave and allow me to strengthen the skills I have developed. The academic rigor and characteristics of the program make GRAD SCHOOL my top choice for graduate school.

Personalize it a bit more to the university you are applying to. Is there a particular professors whose research is particularly interesting? Do they have an on-site clinic specializing in culturally or linguistically diverse individuals? Anything explicitly specific to the school that swayed you to apply here would be important to include - let them know that you've really done the research on their program and what they have to offer! What you have right now is a bit vague and could be included in your SOP for a number of programs, make it unique to each one!
vsa10002   
Dec 30, 2013
Graduate / Speech Language Pathology Graduate School Personal Statement [3]

You seem like a very competitive candidate for SLP grad programs! While I'm not sure exactly what prompt you are responding to, my main concern with your personal statement is that it reads like your resume put into paragraphs. I feel like if I looked at your resume and then read this personal statement I wouldn't learn anything new about you. Perhaps incorporating personal anecdotes would help the committees reading this learn more about you! Try and make your personality shine through a bit more so that the committee can learn more about you as more than just a student - what do you have to offer them?

For example, you mention being involved in lots of activities through NSSHLA - what sort of activities? What did you learn? How can you use this and apply it to the program you are writing to?

I would also recommend tailoring your statement to each school you are applying to. What about that particular program makes you want to apply there - is there a faculty member you want to work with? Do they have a study abroad option? Do they have a wide variety of clinical placements? Whatever appeals most to you about that program should be spelled out in your statement - let them know that you took the time to look into their program.
vsa10002   
Dec 6, 2013
Graduate / Autism focus for Speech-Language Pathology SOP [2]

Reflecting on your work, life, and educational experience, describe how you arrived at the decision to pursue a career in communication disorders/speech-language pathology. As we are unable to interview all applicants to our program, we like to use your essay as a way to get to know you. As you consider your response, do let your personality shine through so that we are able to get a good sense of who you are.

Growing up, I referred to a cell phone as a "seg phone," affectionately calling the device what my Polish mother did. I can still hear the teacher chuckling as she explained my mistake and remember how my mother and I laughed when I told her what I had learned that day. As a first generation American, my first taste of the communication obstacles that individuals can face related to my parents' bilingualism. This early experience with communication difficulties paired with my goal of working with individuals with autism has encouraged me to apply to the Communication Disorders master's program at ********.

My immigrant parents did an amazing job teaching themselves to communicate with my peers, their parents, and the teachers I had; however, there were often speed bumps along the way. Instances like the cell phone/"seg phone" confusion still happen all the time! Recently, my roommates informed me that what I use in the shower is called a loofah, not a sponge. While I love the little communication quirks that come with a multi-lingual family, not everyone is as accepting. I realized how difficult it could be for my parents to communicate during my sixth grade parent-teacher conference. My father, a Colombian, was having the toughest time asking my teacher about my performance in class. This young woman was either unable or unwilling to work around the communication barrier. Instead, she became rude enough that, as a sixth grader, I had to intervene and ask the questions for my father in order to alleviate the growing tension in the room.

Bilingualism initially interested me in studying communication disorders; however, it was in "Introduction to Communication Disorders," that I knew I had made the right choice in pursing speech-language pathology. Towards the end of the semester, we viewed a video about the rehabilitation of soldiers following traumatic brain injuries. Seeing how difficult it was for these heroes to speak, let alone swallow, and the techniques used to tackle the dysphagia and cognitive issues fascinated me - it was all I could talk about for days! This confirmation motivated me to shadow speech-language pathologists in private practice and school settings. With each experience, I learned about administering tests, planning lessons for students, and developing tactics for dealing with children who may not be as excited about therapy sessions as I am.

A particular experience while shadowing in a private practice opened yet another door in the field of speech-language pathology. One evening, three autistic children came in for a group session in which I was lucky enough to participate. The children were full of energy and unable to focus on the activities. A music therapist and speech pathologist led this session, so we used singing and games to help the children practice introducing themselves, taking turns with one another, and following directions. The focus of this session was on their social and pragmatic skills, but it was interesting to see how using songs could also target their articulation issues. This experience sparked my curiosity in the autistic population, thus pushing me to land an Undergraduate Research Assistant position in ******** studies. My ongoing experiences in this lab have helped me gain a greater understanding of the steps that go into large-scale studies while exposing me to the complexities of working with individuals with autism.

My interest in the autistic population has only grown stronger. During one speech pathology job shadow, I sat in on a session with a boy that had severe autism. This child had little to no expressive vocabulary and could not sit still. In an attempt to focus him, the speech pathologist brought out Play-Doh to use in an activity; within seconds, he had stuffed the substance in his mouth! I found the session to be completely overwhelming and had so many questions afterwards: Can he understand what we say to him? What techniques can be used to help him participate in an interaction?

To this day, I am just as curious about autism and how we can help this population. I believe that ******** can provide me with the education and opportunities necessary to put myself in a position to help individuals with autism. The work of ****** and the ***** Lab tackle questions that I would love to help answer. *******'s use of technology to discover more about the social-pragmatic language of this population is exactly the aspect of autism that I am interested in. The social isolation that plagues individuals with autism is what I believe to be the most significant consequence of this disorder. Learning more about their social-pragmatic language is the first step in developing therapy tactics for these individuals so that they are better able to relate to their peers. *********'s use of technology is something I have not yet been exposed to, but I would jump at the opportunity to be involved in this research.

******** provides incredible support to their students, offers a plethora of clinical placements in the Boston area, and has a reputation for producing strong speech-language pathologists. A goal I have set for myself is to go beyond becoming a speech-language pathologist. I hope to become a leader among my peers and I believe that with a degree from ******* I will be poised to do so.
vsa10002   
Dec 6, 2013
Graduate / Understand and work with elementary particles; SOP for pursuing Physics at Cornell. [8]

"My classes in circuits, electricity and magnetism equipped me with the necessary to tackle any undergraduate level problem. " With the necessary what?

I think that the newer version of your background is stronger, but I agree that you seem to be making yourself look like you are under qualified rather than playing up why you would be beneficial to their program. I have very little experience with physics or engineering so I can't give concrete examples but I think there are ways to acknowledge that you don't have much physics experience without making yourself look like you wouldn't thrive at Cornell. Think of the benefits of having an engineering background in a graduate physics program - this can help you stand apart from other applicants that solely studied physics; giving a concrete example of something you've experienced as an engineering student and applying it to physics could show how even without as strong of a physics background you would be able to thrive in the program. I also think that playing up your physics research would be beneficial. That section just reads like a list of tasks you completed - perhaps try elaborating on a particular example in the lab (as a reader, I find this to be more interesting than simply stating that you did x, y, and z).

As I look over your statement again, you're listing everything you've done without really using any anecdotal support. It doesn't quite seem like you're passionate about physics or confident in your abilities to perform in a physics grad program. Be confident in yourself! You have a lot to offer a graduate program, don't be afraid to let them know what that is!
vsa10002   
Dec 2, 2013
Graduate / SOP on Why I Want to Obtain My Master's of Social Work and Be a Social Worker [4]

This was lovely! I would suggest going through and removing any contractions (didn't --> did not, etc.) and I think that will make it seem a bit more formal without become dry. The other suggestion I have is to try and find a way to connect each paragraph to the next. It reads like you are just answering each part of the prompt without flowing it into the next part of the question. Finding away to transition from one paragraph to the next will do wonders for those that read it.

I think the answers you provide and your motivations for becoming a social worker come across as smart and sincere, so great job!

Best of luck!
vsa10002   
Dec 2, 2013
Graduate / My immigrant parents did an amazing job ; Speech-Language Pathology PS [4]

As a first generation American, my first taste of the communication obstacles that individuals can face related to my parents' bilingualism. This early experience with communication difficulties paired with my increasing awareness of the different forms that communication disorders can appear, fuels my desire to apply to the Speech-Language Pathology master's program at **********.

My immigrant parents did an amazing job teaching themselves to communicate with my peers, their parents, and the teachers I had; however, there were often speed bumps along the way. In the third grade, I remember a teacher laughing at the fact that my mother and I referred to cell phones as "seg phones." When I informed my mother, a Polish native, of how wrong we were we could not stop laughing. Instances like this still happen all the time! Recently, my roommates informed me that what I use in the shower is called a loofah, not a sponge. While I love the little communication quirks that come with a multi-lingual family, not everyone is as accepting. I realized how difficult it could be for my parents to communicate during my sixth grade parent teacher conference. My father, a Colombian, was having the toughest time understanding what my teacher was saying; this young woman was either unable or unwilling to work around the communication barrier - instead she became frustrated and a bit rude.

Bilingualism initially interested me in studying communication disorders; it was in "Introduction to Communication Disorders," after watching a video on the rehabilitation of veterans that suffered traumatic brain injuries that I knew I had made the right choice in pursing speech-language pathology. This confirmation motivated me to shadow speech-language pathologists in private practice and school settings. With each experience, I learned about administering tests, planning lessons for students, and tactics for dealing with children who may not be as into therapy sessions as you.

A particular experience while shadowing in a private practice opened yet another door in the field of speech-language pathology. One evening, three autistic children came in for a group session that I was lucky enough to participate in. The children were full of energy and unable to focus on the activities. A music therapist also led this session, so we used singing and games to help center the children, practice introducing themselves, take turns with one another, and follow directions. This experience sparked my interest in the autistic population, thus pushing me to land an Undergraduate Research Assistant position in *********'s Early Detection and Optimal Outcome studies. My ongoing experiences in this lab have helped me gain a greater understanding of the steps that go into large-scale studies. Prior to working with *******, I conducted research with the Human Development and Family Studies department, investigating the effects of paternal mental health on father-child relationship quality. This was my first research experience and allowed me to be involved in every aspect, including creating posters and papers to present at conferences.

My aspiration to continue being involved in research is one reason that I am applying for the Master's program at ********. The numerous amounts of research projects coupled with the connections that this program has to various facilities in Boston is one aspect that truly influences my application to this program. While my current research experience is with autism, I have also had an interest in aphasia; the work of ********* and her tour of the Aphasia Center during an Open House further cement my goal to contribute to aphasia or traumatic brain injury research.

At that Open House, ****** had said that ****** "wants to graduate leaders of the field." Being a leader in the field of speech-language pathology, someone that continues to challenge himself or herself and pushes those around them to do the same, is something I aspire to and feel that I can accomplish with a degree from ********. I am currently enrolled in "Neuroscience of Cognitive and Communicative Disorders" and have never been more challenged by a course; it requires hours of reading, hundreds of pages of notes, and multiple moments where I find myself thinking "how am I going to put this all together?" This course is the first in my major that has truly pushed me to my limits and I have loved every minute of it. With a focus and deep interest in neuroscience, I will come to the Master of Science Speech-Language Pathology program at ********** as a student that thrives when she is challenged and that will use her curiosity to discover ways to influence the field of speech-language pathology and become a leader.
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳