Undergraduate / Syracuse - who/what influenced ; dream person; work experience;real-world experiences [4]

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Undergraduate / PEEDA; Rice supp- extracurricular activities or work experiences [8]

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Undergraduate / Undergrad Writing Course Assignment - Compare/Contrast Essay - "Everyday Use" by A. Walker [2]

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Undergraduate / "Management of drainage systems"; Lehigh Supp [6]

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Undergraduate / "Management of drainage systems"; Lehigh Supp [6]

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In your opinion, what are the five characteristics of a successful person?

Hard work is the first trait a successful man must have. Successful people know the basic science of life: your input will equal your output.

Secondly, for me the desire to carry on our dreams and never quit is very important . If a person wants to get a promotion, he must try again and again even though he doesn't get one for the first time.

Likewise, the person who is pro - active (his ability to act and put his idea in motion) has better chances of being successful.
In addition, the ability to adapt to a new environment is one of the most important trait. Suppose, a new company changes its CEO. The successful person is the one who adapts to the new procedure of the company and knows how the company operates.

Finally, the successful person must have a leadership and communication traits. Very good communication skills can even make a person charismatic, and this is especially important in jobs that involve working and being in touch with a lot of people.

To summarize all of this, taking a successful soccer manager, Sir Alex Ferguson as an example. The manager works hard in everyday training, develops new tactics to break down the opponent's defense. He has a desire to win and doesn't give up until the final whistle. Even though he recently retired, he had been on the job for more than 26 years. He adapted himself with three decades. And finally, he can motivate his player and nick a goal in the final minutes of the match.

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Undergraduate / passionate about exploring -Rice Univ., why do you choose that particular school of study? [3]

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Undergraduate / PEEDA; Rice supp- extracurricular activities or work experiences [8]

What motivated you to apply to Rice University? (200 word limit)

The first time I heard of Rice was when my professor said, many of his students wanted to get into Rice University. Upon reviewing myself, I found that Rice can be the perfect place for me to continue my undergrad education. Along with the amazing student body, I am also fond of the unique residential system rice has. Rice also has an incredible student to faculty ratio of 6:1 and personal contact with professors. As per my experience, when I upgraded from ten to eleven our class size reduced from fifty to fifteen. As a result, my academics improved as the teacher had to help very small number of students only. Rice contains very strong engineering department and can help me fulfill my dream of being an engineer. Another thing that fascinates me about Rice is the research opportunities the university provides. Not only Rice but I love Huston as a whole. The city itself contains large areas for research opportunities.

I also think that Rice can develop different qualities that are hidden inside me. Along with engineering I want to improve my other qualities like public speaking, creative writing, and many others.

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Undergraduate / PEEDA; Rice supp- extracurricular activities or work experiences [8]

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With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study. (150 word limit)

I am one of the students who has a genuine interest in the field of Mechanical engineering. It is the innovative application of science and technology to the design, production and operation of mechanical devices, machinery and systems. Studying engineering and excelling in it gives me the power to make a difference. Living in Nepal, one thing you often come across is load shedding which extends up to sixteen hours a day. During my examination, I used to sit down to study and then suddenly the power goes out. Hence, I was compelled to study under dim light and studying in such manner is not effective. I took physics in my high school just for the purpose of understanding how an energy source worked and how can a better energy source be established in Nepal so that our future generations would not have to face the same problem as we did.

Undergraduate / PEEDA; Rice supp- extracurricular activities or work experiences [8]

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My interest in the field of engineering got me to volunteer at PEEDA (People, Energy and Environment Development Association), an NGO that aims to mobilize both local and external resources to harness Nepal's indigenous resources, thereby promoting activities for economic development and poverty alleviation.

While working here, I was involved with drafting a report about the preparation of soap via Jatropha plant. In addition to the report, I created a brochure for this particular NGO.

The first thing I learned after coming to this place is the method to prepare soap. I got to see different processes used like saponification, incubation, different methods of testing soaps like pH testing. Creating brochure gave me the opportunity to bring out my creative ideas.

This working opportunity has made me more of a responsible person. Today, I can take many responsibilities and put my own creative ideas to carry out the responsibilities given to me.

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