Undergraduate / I have always been fascinated with personalities; Transfer [2]

I have always been fascinated with personalities. Dating back to my middle school days, I would wonder as to why certain kids broke off into certain groups or cliques. Then I started to begin to come up with ideas on how this all happened and the reactions of interactions would differ from one child to another.this is a bit weirdly worded, you should change this Maybe my mind wasn't as developed as it is today to understand the different interests of each individual, but I still am very astonished by the study of human social behavior. After exploring my options, I believe that UIUC has all the right materials to help me expand my knowledge. From the Undergraduate Library, to the advisors in the Sociology department, I know without a doubt that UIUC will help me accomplish receiving my Bachelor's Degree in Sociology. At my current institution, I have taken the right classeswhich are what classes exactly? to begin the path to transfer to a top University. Although I am grateful for all the resources and material that my institution has provided me with, I'm ready to take the next step in finishing what I started. Attending a top tier University with many inspired students will provide me with fuel to my competitive nature to succeed. Looking into all the clubs and extra curricular activities, I am very interested in getting involved to better myself as a student at the University. I will attempt to not only meet the standards of the University, but to go above and beyond to one day be standing in line waiting with my diploma to take a picture with then to be, the all new restored, Alma Mater

I think this is good overall, however just refer to the university by its name rather than 'the University' :)