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Name: Kian Jer Koh
Joined: Dec 25, 2013
Last Post: Dec 29, 2013
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Ryxion   
Dec 29, 2013
Undergraduate / Comments on Yale essays? (Why Yale, Reflection on something you would like to say more) [5]

What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply?

In searching for a college that has a uniquely constructive community and academic establishment, I immediately thought of Yale. Yale has a unique energy that empowers people to become better as they learn together. The rich traditions in Yale such as "The Game" and the "rush" is something that I look forward to. Yale's extracurricular activities, which include even A'Capella and HackYale pique my interest. Finally, thanks to Yale's commitment to students, and its generous financial aid, I can hope to reach my goals at Yale without placing too big a financial burden on my parents.

In this essay, please reflect on something you would like us to know about you that we might not learn from the rest of your application, or on something about which you would like to say more. You may write about anything-from personal experiences or interests to intellectual pursuits.

As a child, I gave no thought to my father's occupation. The sight of him coming home after work or going overseas for a short period was a common occurrence to us. Yet, every sight of my father sitting at the sofa, clearly exhausted after a day's work invokes a surge of emotion in me: gratitude, empathy and even sadness.

As the youngest child from a poor family, my father started from scratch and accomplished everything by his diligence. He has always endorsed me to try new things in order to seek out my own passion, be it Taekwando or diabolo lessons. Even though I enjoyed those trials, the ultimate question remains: what do I want to do with my life?

After brainstorming for some time, I finally came up with the answer.

I don't know.

However, I know my choice starts with education. After much gleaning, and with the advice from my father, I chose to pursue chemical engineering, mainly because the aspects covered are my area of interest, but partly because I followed my heart. The "how" in everything has always intrigued me, especially in the handling of common objects, such as wastewater management or recycling plastic bottles into polyesters.

As I ventured further into science, it became clear to me that energy and environment are two of the most important challenges to mankind. This is where Yale's specialty lies. While other colleges usually combine Chemical Engineering to Biological Engineering, Yale combines the former with Environmental Engineering. I think these two disciplines are interdependent because they are well established on their own and they benefit greatly from each other at the same time. This unique relationship is what appeals to me.

Reading Yale's Chemical engineering research and Interdisciplinary Research Priorities has made me even more eager to be a part of Yale's community. All this while I have only read and studied theories and concepts, and now I am eager to put those knowledge into good use. Plus there are research areas such as soft matter and complex fluids and energy, particularly the energy and sustainability research in IRP because sustainability is a crucial factor given the explosive rise in energy consumption. I strongly feel the urge to look into this aspect in my academic life.

Most importantly, Yale's engineering students learn the complex social, economic and environmental implications of new technology. Many other colleges' graduates expand beyond the technical field, but Yale's stands out as one of the most astounding. This all-rounded growth for Yale's engineering students is what I seek because even though chemical engineering is my current choice, it is very possible for me to venture into other fields such as business. No matter what, I feel that the overall knowledge in social, economic and environment aspect is equally important as the curriculum. Again, Yale's engineering program ensures this type of growth, which is why it appeals to me.

In the end, even though I have taken the first step by choosing my education, my ultimate question of "what do I want to do with my life?" still remains unanswered. But I am confident that together with Yale, I can find that answer, and when the day comes, no matter what sort of answer it may be, I know Yale will have prepared me to excel at that choice.
Ryxion   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "We buy your sh#t and sell it back to your for a profit"; St. Olaf - Interim Course [10]

Overall I thought your essay is really great! It was really insightful to me and you tied your personal goals and direction really well.

The ending can be improved, but your new ending is way better to me as it brings much more impact. And like WizFan2 said, I don't know what the adcoms will think about the sh*t thing, but since you already used it at the beginning, why not?

Though grammar isn't my forte..

What better way of learning about waste disposal, than from those for whom recycling isn't a choice, but a necessity of life? What faster route to acquaint yourself with real life economics than watching the many NGO's working in tandem with the local mafia, banks and the government to provide affordable loans to those in need? What shorter path to mastering various aspects of urban planning, than by finding the innovative designs in ramshackle constructions?

-The commas are unnecessary
-what faster route to acquaint... than by watching...

Just some really minor stuffs on grammar. Again I thought that this essay is great. All the best!
Ryxion   
Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / Comments on MIT short essays? (cultural identity, which department) [6]

Alright here's the edited one and another response.

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why?

My country's education taught me to study everyday and take everything passively. Honestly, I was affected. There was no "do what you love", just good grades. Now I have realized that it is time to break free from the shackles. Fortunately, I know my interests: Mathematics and Science, especially Physics and Chemistry. Finding the UROP has made me really eager to be part of MIT to further explore and develop my interests. With flexibility and opportunities as parts of my consideration, the Department of Chemical Engineering appeals to me because of the research breadth and the opportunities chemical engineering offers.

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

Not for the first time, Mrs. Leong, my Chinese language teacher did something bizarre. "If you don't want me to teach, just say 'Thank you teacher.' I will leave immediately."

Then I had to do the more bizarre thing. I spearheaded the three words, and to our amazement she walked out of the class.

And next I was standing at her office table and given a penalty mark of eight for disrespect and improper behavior. The worse thing was that I was not the sole leader of this "operation", and two other people who spearheaded the words were spared.

Maybe because I was part of the prefects, a group she hated for personal reasons, that I received this treatment. The only thought in my mind was injustice and unfairness.

Upon reflection, I realized that she gave me a glimpse of the people in society: good and bad, rational and preposterous. Mrs. Leong happened to be a special person I met, maybe not in the best way, but as a young student at that time, she opened my eyes.

In the end, I am content. I give her my respect even though she did not seem to give me hers because she taught me the patience to handle difficult situations and to look on the bright side. I thank every good person who has changed me for the better, but I thank the less desirable people even more because they have taught me something new in different ways.
Ryxion   
Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / "Let your life speak."/ extracurricular activities or work experiences [7]

Agreed with moderator, couldn't really understand the first one :/

As for the second response, it is definitely ok to talk about volunteer experience. However, how does that experience show who you are? Basically the admission officers want to know you through your essays, but I cannot see your personality or how you think through this response. The golden question to me is "Why should I admit you?" Thats the advice people always give me. Try to think about it as you write your response.

Again, personal opinion. Good luck and cheers!
Ryxion   
Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / Technology Clinic and passion - Why Lafayette? My attempt to be a little different. [11]

Yes i agree with what most of them said. You have plenty of great points. I mean, we're so used to the usual essay format that anything beyond it looks weird. I understand your attempt to be creative and different, but as a student myself I cannot say for certain. Personally i cannot see 'you' inside. Other people might also do a similar list, what makes yours showcase who you truly are and how the good points of the college may help you?

Just personal opinion though. Cheers!
Ryxion   
Dec 25, 2013
Undergraduate / Comments on MIT short essays? (cultural identity, which department) [6]

Please tell us more about your cultural background and identity in the space below (100 word limit)

I'm Chinese, one of the three main races in Malaysia, the other two being Malay and Indian. Already living together before Malaysia's independence in 1957, we have assimilated each other's cultures. We celebrate our different religious festivals together. Most notable of all is the language we use in conversations, which we call the "rojak" language: a mix of Malay, Tamil, Chinese, even Hokkien and Cantonese dialect. And while people have speech crutches such as "ahs" and "umms", Malaysians have "lah". "Come and join us for lunch 'lah'!" To "umm" is to be human, but to "lah" is to be Malaysian. (100 words)

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (100 words)

If you get too near to it you will get hurt, but too far and you lose its benefit.

It is fire.

As a child, I have always been fascinated by nature. Fire, in particular, is my favorite. I read, research, and watch anything about it. I join outdoor camps to learn how to build a fire, from the ignition to the tinder and fuel. At the same time I appreciate what fire has done for us. My strange obsession with fire continues, and I hope some day my knowledge on fire will be useful for something. (97 words)

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

The Department of Chemical Engineering appeals to me. This is a boring statement but I just like physics and chemistry. Many chemical reactions are beautiful and intriguing, such as the weird decomposition of mercury(II) thiocyanate and the Briggs-Rauscher Reaction. Furthermore, chemical engineering, with all its linkage to other engineering disciplines, offers opportunities to do great things. Chemical engineering itself covers so many aspects, and to be honest I do not know which area to specialize in because I like many of them. But I do know that my interest is in chemical engineering, which I hope to pursue in college. (100 words)

//I am worried because I think some part of them sounds weird but at the same time I'm just trying to be myself. Please bear with me and many thanks!
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